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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
There were times in my life when I needed you most ~ The sad thing was that you were never there. I am your daughter and you know nothing about me; how can that be? Judging by your actions, it’s very easy. You are capable of picking me up every two weeks, but are you capable of loving me as you should? In five years I have given you chance after chance to be involved in my life and all you have shown me is that you don’t want anymore chances. I don’t understand how you could cross my mind a million times a day, yet be so distant. It is so hard for me to be able to let go and yet I think I have to for myself. It pains me so much that you could care so little about your true creation. I guess that somehow I keep telling myself that it is ok because I’m going to receive a phone call from you and everything is going to be better. I haven’t received the call and I am ready to stop trying so hard at our relationship and try harder at the better aspects of my life. I have decided that after five years of rejection one can only do one of two things: move on or sulk over it for the rest of your life and never care about anything else. I have done that for five years now and it’s not fair for me to have to cry anymore. You could have at least tried to show me that you cared or you even pretended. Fact is, you didn’t and I have finally found the strength to move on and realize that I can get along just fine without the heartache that you put me through. I am ready to say good-bye now so if you accidentally realize how bad you have hurt me, maybe you’ll give me a call? As you all can see, this doesn't rhyme well and once again it is about someone who in my life has hurt me. This is just something I wrote out of my feelings after talking to my dad about how he gave me up for his girlfriend. I'd like to hear what you all think eventhough it isn't much in the way of poetry... ~*~Jessica Lynn~*~ </font></div> [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 06-04-2000).] |
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ILoveSrfrs Member
since 1999-11-14
Posts 69California |
Hey, I truly loved this. You wrote out your feelings nicely and you really showed how hurt you were. The lines I liked best were "I don’t understand how you could cross my mind a million times a day, yet be so distant. " and "I am ready to say good-bye now so if you accidentally realize how bad you have hurt me, maybe you’ll give me a call?" Those both express your hurt so clearly. Great job on this one, and keep writing! |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
You get so detailed and elaborate with your writing... I love it...that's one thing I've had trouble with for years. You never cloud up your message with overly-thickened metaphores. good job... maybe your dad should read that poem. keep it up. Jeremy Halstead |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thanks Marissa and Jeremy for your kind words! this whole thing with my dad has been one long and desolate journey, but my writing helps ease some of the pain he has caused, as well as you wrods of wisdom!! thanks for you thoughts on my aspirations!!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
Jess, this is great, you have ac capability of getting your words and thoughts out so freely without clutering the meaning. It's absolutley great, and yeah, i lost my dad too. Not to another girl, but to alcohol. It's hard but together we can make it through!!!  Micale |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
 Cale~ what would I do with out you?! you are so right! we both lost our dads and you know what?!!? we have eachother! I love you. you are where all my inspiration comes from. with out you I don't think that I would've ever even started writing!! thanks for everything you do for me! I love you girl!  "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
as i sit here and read your poem i cant help it but have my eyes fill up with tears. it brought back memories. not of my dad but my mom. my mom didnt show up every two weeks but when she felt like it. it was a time when i needed her the most. but instead of having her to look up to i look up to my sister who has been there for me all along. but i give you mad props for this poem. its the story of your life. a painful time. at least for me it was. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
 oh erin, I'm very sorry to hear that you have had to bear the pain I have. It's very traumatic and with myself I had a lot of issues due to it. I'm better now and moving on with my life. I hope one day eventhough it is hard, that you'll be able to forgive your mom.  That is the only way to find freedom from your pain. Keep your head up! Love ya lots! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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~frustrated writer~ Member
since 2008-02-25
Posts 84 |
i know how you feel. my situation is worse than yours. just learn to accept and let go. and please do remember not to compare yourself to others for you will become bitter. don't cling to the pain you're now facing. Live.Love.Learn =) **LiRa** |
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