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Teen Poetry #2

Please tell me what you think about this one...

Marissa
Junior Member

since 1999-12-25

Posts 20

0 posted 2000-06-04 01:01 PM

Me not liking you is how things may sometimes seem
Because most of the time I say things that I really don't mean
I hope you know by now those words are only said to hide-
What I feel and what I think deep down inside
When you walk into the room, I get the biggest smile upon my face
The tingly feeling I get from seeing you could never be erased
You always make me laugh, yet you know how to make me scream
But having someone like you in my life is like living a fairytale dream
Every minute spent with you are moments I'll always treasure
I could never forget all the special times that we have shared together
I love being with you no matter where it may be
As long as you are there, my happiness is guaranteed
You mean the world and more to me-that's just what I want I want you to know
But I'm sorry I can't say that to you and let my feelings show
I know I have denied over and over again that I love you
But believe me when I sayd that I really honestly do

amazon_lover
Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland

1 posted 2000-06-04 02:29 PM

Hi Marissa
It was lovely one and I see in every line that you love. I too have wondered why my dove can't see the love I hold for her. Why she can't just love me back ? Say those words. Is it a crime to show someone you love ? Its a nice one and you may have your reasons to hide your love.
(((((hugs)))))
A_L

LoveAll
Member

since 2000-05-24

Posts 148
B'dale, USA

2 posted 2000-06-04 02:36 PM

Great job! I really love it, and I understand how you feel. Don't worry, everything happens for a reason!

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

3 posted 2000-06-04 03:10 PM

this is a great one! I love it. for three months I hid my love from my boyfriend and it drove him away. I was more so scared that if I told him I loved him it would scare him away. Just think about what you want to do and how your love would feel if they knew how you feel. Good Luck. I'm sure the decision you make will be the right one as long as you look into your heart to find the answer! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

4 posted 2000-06-04 04:17 PM

This is the kind of poem the writer never forgets...and you'll never forget about the person you're writing it about...trust me. In weeks from now, you could be broken up, but years from now, this persons name will still give you a little chill in your spine. You conveyed that kind of passion in your poem, good job.

Jeremy D. Halstead

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