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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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My anonymity Makes me what I want to be My own hero My favorite movie star But my rebellious side Comes along for the ride And when I lose it I'm an alien to you What am I trying to say? Would you still love me anyway If I go crazy Lazy Hazy What if I catch fire Desire Inspire you to want me Here I am This is me Welcome to eternity My satin gloves My platform shoes There are those times I find I just Confuse myself Bruise myself News to self 'You're being irresponsible' Your standard honesty Makes it hard for you to see I'm your hero Your favorite movie star Your uncensored words Can't believe what I just heard I might just lose it You're an alien to me What are we going to do? Does it matter to you If I deny you Try you Tie you What if I explode Corrode Unload my mixed up feelings Here I am This is me Welcome to eternity My rose tattoo My black fur coat There are those times I find I just Demote myself Quote myself Note to self 'You're being irresponsible' I am not the one who takes Advice you feel like giving I'm the ever after that You dream of one day living If you still think I'm wonderful You'll never really know me But in the end, if love is real You're gonna have to show me Here I am This is me Welcome to eternity My diamond ring My leather dress Those quiet times when no one knows I Test myself Stress myself Confess to self 'You're being irresponsible' It's another world But it's something more than ordinary Such a lovely day And it's nothing more than ordinary living That you're living - Lit |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
God this is fantastic! Definately a peice for the wall. (That side of my room that's covered in scribbled poetry, LOL.) Another song, right? I can feel the rythm in this one and I love it! Here I am This is me Welcome to eternity My satin gloves My platform shoes There are those times I find I just Confuse myself Bruise myself News to self 'You're being irresponsible' Makes me want to get up and jam! I'm serious, as soon as you put out a CD let me know... I'll be your first customer.  ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Yeah, this one's a song too. I find that I turn a lot of my poems into songs, and visa-versa. I haven't written anything new this week. But thanks so much for the compliments! I will definately let ya know when we get a cd out, it's a dream of mine. If you wish upon a star......peace out!  *~Meredith~* It's another world But it's something more than ordinary Such a lovely day And it's nothing more than ordinary living That you're living - Lit |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Wow, awesome poem!!! Seriously, it's incredible and so full of raw emotion-I love it!! You hafta let me know when you put out a CD too-I'll be your #1 fan!! Hehe...Wow I'm still in awe by how great your peom is. You inspire me. ~<3 Alawayz~ **Nikki** |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
This is my favorite poem I have read since I joined passions for sure! But my rebellious side Comes along for the ride And when I lose it I'm an alien to you those lines took me by suprise because I am acting just as your whole poem describes. Wow My favorite of yours for sure. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
That's the kind of poem I find most fun to read. I'm aware that the emotion and the message weren'r meant to be fun, but you word usage and rythm make the experience or reading seem that way. Keep it up. |
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Nutmeg1093 New Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 4Cloquet, MN |
Wow! This is really great! I can really see it being lyrics to a great song. I just love the way that it flows and the way that it rhymes... but it doesnt, ya know? I REALLY REALLY like this. I can't express that enough to you. Keep up the great work! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey kids, it's been a while since I've been here, I was on vacation with the family. But I just wanted to let ya'll know how grateful I am for all your positive comments. It makes me feel loved. So thank you all, I love you, peace out! It's another world But it's something more than ordinary Such a lovely day And it's nothing more than ordinary living That you're living - Lit |
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bulletproof2312 Junior Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 28Beaumont Tx, 77707 |
Wow, I think I might know where this one is comming from, Awesome as a peom, even better as a song... *Smile On* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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