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LyricFetish
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since 01-13-2000
Posts 515
North Carolina


0 posted 05-29-2000 02:47 PM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LyricFetish

My anonymity
Makes me what I want to be
My own hero
My favorite movie star
But my rebellious side
Comes along for the ride
And when I lose it
I'm an alien to you

What am I trying to say?
Would you still love me anyway
If I go crazy
Lazy
Hazy
What if I catch fire
Desire
Inspire you to want me

Here I am
This is me
Welcome to eternity
My satin gloves
My platform shoes
There are those times I find I just
Confuse myself
Bruise myself
News to self
'You're being irresponsible'

Your standard honesty
Makes it hard for you to see
I'm your hero
Your favorite movie star
Your uncensored words
Can't believe what I just heard
I might just lose it
You're an alien to me

What are we going to do?
Does it matter to you
If I deny you
Try you
Tie you
What if I explode
Corrode
Unload my mixed up feelings

Here I am
This is me
Welcome to eternity
My rose tattoo
My black fur coat
There are those times I find I just
Demote myself
Quote myself
Note to self
'You're being irresponsible'

I am not the one who takes
Advice you feel like giving
I'm the ever after that
You dream of one day living
If you still think I'm wonderful
You'll never really know me
But in the end, if love is real
You're gonna have to show me

Here I am
This is me
Welcome to eternity
My diamond ring
My leather dress
Those quiet times when no one knows I
Test myself
Stress myself
Confess to self
'You're being irresponsible'



 It's another world
But it's something more than ordinary
Such a lovely day
And it's nothing more than ordinary living
That you're living
- Lit


© Copyright 2000 Meredith - All Rights Reserved
Daysleeper
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since 04-23-2000
Posts 120


1 posted 05-29-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Daysleeper   Email Daysleeper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Daysleeper

God this is fantastic! Definately a peice for the wall. (That side of my room that's covered in scribbled poetry, LOL.) Another song, right? I can feel the rythm in this one and I love it!

Here I am
This is me
Welcome to eternity
My satin gloves
My platform shoes
There are those times I find I just
Confuse myself
Bruise myself
News to self
'You're being irresponsible'

Makes me want to get up and jam! I'm serious, as soon as you put out a CD let me know... I'll be your first customer.  

...Daysleeper...


 "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller.
"But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin."
"In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy."
"Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World"


LyricFetish
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since 01-13-2000
Posts 515
North Carolina


2 posted 05-30-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LyricFetish

Yeah, this one's a song too. I find that I turn a lot of my poems into songs, and visa-versa. I haven't written anything new this week. But thanks so much for the compliments! I will definately let ya know when we get a cd out, it's a dream of mine. If you wish upon a star......peace out!  

*~Meredith~*

 It's another world
But it's something more than ordinary
Such a lovely day
And it's nothing more than ordinary living
That you're living
- Lit


Snickers
Member
since 05-25-2000
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT


3 posted 05-30-2000 03:37 PM       View Profile for Snickers   Email Snickers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Snickers

Wow, awesome poem!!!  Seriously, it's incredible and so full of raw emotion-I love it!!  You hafta let me know when you put out a CD too-I'll be your #1 fan!! Hehe...Wow I'm still in awe by how great your peom is.  You inspire me.

~<3 Alawayz~
  **Nikki**
Lucius Cade
Member
since 03-23-2000
Posts 239
Saskatchewan


4 posted 05-31-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for Lucius Cade   Email Lucius Cade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucius Cade

This is my favorite poem I have read since I joined passions for sure!

But my rebellious side
Comes along for the ride
And when I lose it
I'm an alien to you

those lines took me by suprise because I am acting just as your whole poem describes. Wow
My favorite of yours for sure.


 Lucidity is the answer to all problems
Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 06-01-2000
Posts 572
Morris, Ill. U.S.A


5 posted 06-01-2000 01:29 AM       View Profile for Jeremy Halstead   Email Jeremy Halstead   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremy Halstead

That's the kind of poem I find most fun to read.  I'm aware that the emotion and the message weren'r meant to be fun, but you word usage and rythm make the experience or reading seem that way.  Keep it up.
Nutmeg1093
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since 05-31-2000
Posts 4
Cloquet, MN


6 posted 06-01-2000 02:46 PM       View Profile for Nutmeg1093   Email Nutmeg1093   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Nutmeg1093

Wow!  This is really great!  I can really see it being lyrics to a great song.  I just love the way that it flows and the way that it rhymes... but it doesnt, ya know?    I REALLY REALLY like this.  I can't express that enough to you.  Keep up the great work!
LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 01-13-2000
Posts 515
North Carolina


7 posted 06-20-2000 05:37 PM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LyricFetish

Hey kids, it's been a while since I've been here, I was on vacation with the family. But I just wanted to let ya'll know how grateful I am for all your positive comments. It makes me feel loved. So thank you all, I love you, peace out!

It's another world
But it's something more than ordinary
Such a lovely day
And it's nothing more than ordinary living
That you're living
- Lit


bulletproof2312
Junior Member
since 03-31-2000
Posts 28
Beaumont Tx, 77707


8 posted 06-21-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for bulletproof2312   Email bulletproof2312   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bulletproof2312

Wow,  I think I might know where this one is comming from,  Awesome as a peom, even better as a song... *Smile On*

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


9 posted 11-15-2007 07:29 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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