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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
I was walking down the road of love thats when tonight, so suddenly the bus of pain slammed into me the pain is not so bad you see its the second time around for me 'Tis much safer to have never loved then to have loved and lost i feel as though im on the cross Back to square one, its not my loss cause in my life, I am the boss I bid fare well to the road of love off to the gutter again it seems it is safe here, no crazy dreams of perfect love, or perfect schemes they dont exist for me, by any means Alcohol, dont fail me please Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Hey, I hope this isn't too serious. True love does exist, we just have to go through many mistakes first. A learning curve... As for alcohol...don't go there, ok? It is safer not to love but how can you ever find true love if you don't trust love...even if that love betrays your heart...there will come a time when it doesn't and you will know that you have found the real thing! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Love is a painful experience...whether you are in it or not. Like Lizzie said, Love is a learning curve. True loves exists. You only have to believe it does. I used to think the same way until I met the guy I will never stop loving. Don't give up on love after a few bad experiences for when you find the right one you will thank your lucky stars that you kept going until you found the right one. You have to experience the bad ones in order to appreciate the good ones. Otherwise I loved this style of writing. Nicely expressed and well written. Great work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
The bus of pain! ROFL Great sybolism! I think i've been hit by that one a couple of times...ouch it hurts... Yes, i agree with the others, a road love is, so if you get off it, you'll never reach the end, the reward. And alcohol isn't the answer, its bad and evil...yeah...bad and evil... Plus, you should drink and drive, even on the road of love, you might get a DUI or MPI, you know get arrested by teh love police LOL!!!! Ok, i'm done, great poem. ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
Great choice of words..love the style, had a good flow... Love the sentence: Back to square one, its not my loss cause in my life, I am the boss All I can say to that is Oh yeah!!! Sorry I can't say anything encouraging 'cause I'm feeling the same way.. Unfortunately, alcohol fails all the time! ~sami~ 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' ~Montaigne~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I know this feeling well. I've had my heart broken pretty badly, and I'm still trying to get over it. I admit that I sometimes feel like it's better to never love than to love and lose, but then I remember those "crazy dreams" that I had. They were wonderful, and if just the illusion of love is so wonderful, think of how wonderful true love is! That thought always gives me hope, along with my belief in soulmates. You have someone out there for you, don't stop looking out for them. Oh, and don't get into alcohol. I know too many wonderful, talented people who destroyed their futures and bodies with that stuff. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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brendon2k Junior Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 38none |
Wow! This is definalty my favorite of all of the poems you have written so far. I am very impressed. I liked the way you worded it all together. Great poem! keep it up. |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
All i can say is awesome!! The bus of pain and I have met a couple of times, and yes, it does hurt and it takes time to recover, but you can do it. I have and yah, it took a while but you'll do it. Loved the poem and the flow!!!!! Keep it up!!!!!! |
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~*Jennifer*~ New Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 6Arkansas |
I think that your work is great! I love the way you used the bus of pain for symbolism. GREAT! Keep writing! I'm sure you'll find your true love! |
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Vanessa New Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 5 |
You can't just give up on love because of a few mistakes. Everyone's right; your mistakes or bad experiences cannot stop you from finding your true love. These experiences will only help you later when that special someone comes along. You'll not what you like and don't like. This was a beautiful poem-please keep up the excellent work! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
WoW. This is great. Very emotional, heart-felt, intriguing. I'm down with your style. Peace, love and cow intestines!  *~Meredith~* It's another world But it's something more than ordinary Such a lovely day And it's nothing more than ordinary living That you're living - Lit |
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emma New Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 8 |
love is there! al you have to do is find it but first you have to love your self and dont fell insecure! alcohol wont help you one bit it will just ruin everything! love ya ~*Emma*~ |
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jenleslie Junior Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 16USA |
that was a great poem! i cant fully identify with the love thing because i've never been in love, but i have been in very deep like and it hurts when that ends and its not you who ended it. its very cool the way you expressed it. w/a hug, jenleslie |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Wow, I have to say I didnt think this poem in particular would get so many replies. But Thank you all who read and enjoyed it. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
As much as I can relate and say how cynical love is, I agree with the others who have replied also. I have seen love...only to be hurt. I learned the hard way that alcohol ALWAYS fails! Love will chew you up and spit you out; if you let it. I let it and made one too many mistakes. I love the way you expressed yourself. Let love take you to a higher position than alcohol! I PROMISE one day he'll come your way--MR. PERFECT! Love ya! Love ~*~Jessica~*~ |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Lol, ok lets get one thing straight, I am a "he" and it would be Mrs. Perfect but thanks for your replyLucidity is the answer to all problems |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
OuCh! I'M rEaLlY SoRrY AbOuT ThAt!! WeLl, I hOpE yOu FiNd MrS. PeRfEcT!! ....VeRy VeRy SoRrY!!! LoVe ~*~JeSsIcA~*~ |
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