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I CAN'T BELIEVE MY PAIN ( please everyone read this & reply)

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Ben Singleton
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since 05-02-2000
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0 posted 05-19-2000 06:42 AM       View Profile for Ben Singleton   Email Ben Singleton   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ben Singleton

It's been a few days
Since we tore apart
I'm losing my life
Aswell as my heart.

It started off great
We had lots of fun
Like when the rain clouds move over
And out comes the sun.

But the lights soon turned to dark
When YOU split up with me
I was left on my own
With no-body to see
Was it a joke?
Because no-body cared
Did she really Love me?
I bet she was dared.

I'm on my own now
With no one to talk to
Still wondering how
I still Love You.

A few days after
You tell all my friends
You want to get back with me
You wanna make amends

Now everybody hates me
For not saying yes
Will somebody help me
My lifes now a mess!
© Copyright 2000 Ben Singleton - All Rights Reserved
Lonelypoet
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since 05-10-2000
Posts 127
Conklin,NY,USA


1 posted 05-19-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Lonelypoet   Email Lonelypoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lonelypoet

Good poem, I hope you find a solution.
Danny Holloway
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since 01-15-2000
Posts 2072
Tulsa, OK


2 posted 05-19-2000 11:53 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Your probably right for not saying yes.
think you saw some true colors, time to move on. Hurt once, shame on her, hurt twice, shame on you!
~~just some thoughts~~
nice writing!
Isabelle
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since 08-25-99
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Indiana


3 posted 05-19-2000 07:21 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabelle

Good poem. I'm sorta in the same sitution. Just don't let everyone get to you. You probably said no because you didn't want to get hurt again, I couldn't blame you. Just remember things do work out. I hope that you do find a solution.

Isa  

 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

TearsOfPearls
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since 09-23-1999
Posts 323
Vereeniging, South-Africa


4 posted 05-19-2000 07:46 PM       View Profile for TearsOfPearls   Email TearsOfPearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TearsOfPearls

This is a great poem. Forget about what other poeple want you to do. Listen to what your heart has to say, some day, they will also understand.

Hope you find a solution.
Ben Singleton
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5 posted 05-20-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for Ben Singleton   Email Ben Singleton   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ben Singleton

Cheers, all of you.
You all seem to have been there before.
Dina
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since 05-20-2000
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6 posted 05-20-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for Dina   Email Dina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dina

I really enjoyed this poem. Ben don't let your life be a mess, just live on for you will find better. If not give me a call k!
She is not worth it!

 
the dark angel
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since 05-10-2000
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7 posted 05-21-2000 08:48 AM       View Profile for the dark angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the dark angel

somewhere we've all been. Class writing-good on ya for saying no, if she screwed you over then she doesn't deserve you back
Love and huggles
the dark angel
-x-
Yu Lan
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since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


8 posted 05-21-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

well written.. sad words, mm, sometimes life is like that, but I think u were probably right for saying no, although, it may have been an honest mistake on her part, and she only just realised now, but, if u say yes, the same may happen again.. just wait it out, see what happens, huh? In the meantime, don't break your heart, k? *_^

Fantastic writing..
Lynne
Ben Singleton
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9 posted 05-22-2000 02:01 PM       View Profile for Ben Singleton   Email Ben Singleton   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ben Singleton

Thanks for yor help, evryone has now apologised and me and Joanne are just friends.Cheers to everyone who read the poem and replied, Thanks for your concern
luvable
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10 posted 06-15-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for luvable   Email luvable   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for luvable

This is a really good poem!! I'm sorry that this happened to you  but you were right for not saying yes!! I hope everything works out for you!! I know how you feel!!

Luv lots,
Luvable
Phoebee
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since 07-09-2000
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Peoria, AZ


11 posted 07-09-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Phoebee   Email Phoebee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Phoebee

I know I'm a little late, but I'd still like to put in my two cents.  This happens to everyone at least once in their life.  It's good that you two are friends again.  Everything happens for a reason.

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


12 posted 11-15-2007 07:40 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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