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Sarah (I'm a jerk) |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
SARAH (I'M A JERK) Not love true, But friendship, through and through Rue for leaving you, No choice of mine, But as time will tell, this is better Better for the two of us. Lust was all, not to forestall, No love, here…at all Only lies, yes lies, As I say I love you, How do I lie to those eyes? The same that haunt my dreams, screaming Why, Why? Now I on my way, Perhaps I’ll pay for my deceit, I’ll not weep over this loss. But it cost you more, Your tears fall to the floor, Do I regret? Not one moment spent, in such relent Was what I did right? No, not right. Even though I know, You’ll never know this, You should have felt, a long time ago In our kiss. Knew that something was amiss. Was it that we were never meant to be, Or was it simply me, destroying us from within So hard to see, to tell. A thing to contemplate, perhaps in hell. In the end, I never meant, To rend you heart (but I did it anyway) , I move again, And again a fresh start. -------------------------------------- Alright, so i am moving again, big surprise. Now coems the hard part, ditch the girl. That may sound cold and heartless (and it is, in many ways.), but i have moved before, and it easier for both people to get used to not being together, before i leave. In answer to any replies, yes i am a jerk, but hey, i am 16 and if my mom moves, theres not a whole hell of a lot i can do about it  . Deranger |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
At least you admit it, and yea when you're 16 there's not a lot you can do about it. It was a good poem, keep writing  - Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." - Anonymous |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Distance is a hard thing to conquer, and if it isn't true love, you really shouldn't try. It will hurt both of you less in the long run. Good luck with the future! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
This was well written. True, the whoel distance this is very hard. If you don't think you can deal with it, then it's not emant to be. Always go with what your heart tells you. (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Its a hard thing when you care for someone but know that it will not work out. Great poem. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Thanks guys, Yeah i know distance doens't work, unfortunatly, i've been in this boat before... Well, at least i get a clean start (regardless if that what i'd actually want or not...): ) Deranger |
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snowgirl17 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 20Cloquet,Mn |
BOys Suck I am sorry for your loss |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Well snowgirl, boys lick, girls suck...but anyway.... Yeah i know i am a jerk, but its easier for her..and me. Thanks for the input guys! |
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guitar_girl New Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 4 |
Wow, it must be really hard to always have to pick up and move. I totally feel your pain because I cannot even imagine leaving behind the friends that I have now. Anyway, awesome poem. It went straight to my heart. ~Jodi~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I feel so bad for you, having to keep moving. Hell, it's not your fault and you're not a jerk....a victim of circumstance, I think. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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aussie_princesss Junior Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 15Australia |
This is sad. Well what can you do but get on with your life. If your shifting you have to go with your family!I'm glad its not me. |
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Haroon New Member
since 2000-05-23
Posts 7 |
'A victim of circumstances'? No - I don't think so. Just because you admit that you're a jerk, doesn't mean you should be forgiven. It's blatantly obvious that you care about yourself (Lust et all), and NOT the feelings of the girl you're gonna leave - Using the whole 'moving' charade as an excuse, you can use to justify your actions -and saying that your 'only 16' is still no excuse...What's gonna happen when you stop 'moving'. When your out there by yourself, in the big wide world? You'll probably become a womaniser but hey...'you were a victim of circumstances'. Im not degrading your poem, its just they say 'what goes around, comes around' - And you still have a lot to learn. Im surprised any one else didn't see this as well...But then again, All were beautiful, honest & caring women - The type that are attracted & intriged by lovable ROGUEs like those such as yourself...until they have their hearts broken, that is... |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a great poem, no...wait...it is a fantastic poem. What I have learned from experience is that...things happen in life, and there is nothing you can do about it, but you can do something about the way you handle the situation. I am not gonna say what you did was right, I'm not gonna say what you did was wrong, in fact, I am not gonna say anything about it. Just follow your heart, liten to that little voice in your head, and always ask for guidance from God, cause He always knows the best way. And believe me, it works, even if you are just 16. I'd know, cause I have tried it, and it worked for me, and I am also just 16. Goodluck for the future, and keep up the good work |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Deranger: This is a good poem as it expresses from 'the other side of the fence.' FOr the lucky people, distance and relationships work but for some it doesn't. You need to have that spark and the sooner you admit that there isn't a spark, the better it will be for the both of you. People get over things and in time this chick will too. I agree with Lizzie in that you are a victim of circumstance. As you are only 16 you have to go where your parents go and for some people that is hard. Time heals wounds and everyone moves on. Haroon: Try to keep it friendly ok. There is no need to go overboard with the criticism. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Blondie69 Junior Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 13 |
hey there. how are you? that was a really good poem, and ur not a jerk, so its ok, everyone makes mistakes, so i'm glad you dont' regret anything because if we don't make mistakes, how can we learn? |
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