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MrHat
Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 34
Gilroy, Ca

0 posted 2000-05-09 10:51 PM


Make-up running from her face
Her tears fall to the floor
She cries for many reasons
She wants to live no more
She seeks comfort in the arms
Of a long-time simple friend
She cries upon the shoulder
In a stream that wont soon end
Her silent cries are soon released
Never to relent
She feels all used up
As if her life was spent
In the comfort of her friend
Of a long-time simple nature
She cries her eyes till they are dry
And she finds hope in her friends shoulder
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This was written about a girl in a class of mine that was sad...but was trying to hide it...but i could tell...she inspired me then and there...and I let her read it when I was done...she said it was cute..then asked with a smiling face "Is my make-up really running?"

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heatherbear
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 48

1 posted 2000-05-09 10:54 PM


Well done!!  Keep it up!!
Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
2 posted 2000-05-10 12:51 PM


very good, MrHat.. yeah, good either way..

hehe, u sure have a way with words! ^_^

great writing..
Lynne

Deranger
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
3 posted 2000-05-10 01:23 AM


Simple friends are often the best at time such as those in your poem.  It reminds me of a time long ago, or maybe it was only a month ago, suppose it really doesn't matter much, anywho back to my point (and i do have one!) Its hard when you know someone close to you is sad, worse when you know you can do nothing about it,

Keep up the good work!

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CSwtThng
Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124

4 posted 2000-05-11 12:08 PM


Really enjoyed this poem!!!!!!!!
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