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Mackenzie
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since 2000-05-04
Posts 8


0 posted 2000-05-09 07:51 PM


dark
ugly
lonely all alone
cry out
hope for one last dream
dream for one last hope
scream
not heard
lonely all alone
dark
ugly
life

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Daysleeper
Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

1 posted 2000-05-09 07:59 PM



Damn... I hate it when that happens... See below.

...Daysleeper...

[This message has been edited by Daysleeper (edited 05-09-2000).]

Daysleeper
Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

2 posted 2000-05-09 08:00 PM



Mackenzie-

Short, poignant and hard. Hard words, hard reality and hard to understand... Hard to understand in the sense of life's often mind-boggling cruelty. I hope this poem expresses one of your views on life, and not how you see life wholly. Good work, keep writing.

...Daysleeper...


 "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh



Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-05-09 09:50 PM


All to true these words of yours but there is also a brighter side. Good work.  
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