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son of man
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since 2000-04-25
Posts 125


0 posted 2000-05-01 12:03 PM


like the raindrops on your cheek

the sparkle of your eyes i keep

tell me softly of your fears

i'll kiss away your salty tears.


not once bitten,
still twice shy,
fell to my death,
in love did i die

and went to heaven...




[This message has been edited by son of man (edited 05-01-2000).]

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poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
1 posted 2000-05-01 12:06 PM


This was very beutiful!!!!!keep writing!smiles poe
4eva_at_heart
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since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

2 posted 2000-05-01 06:09 AM


so gorgeous!!
this is a lovely poem...keep up the great pieces!!

Bec

 i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known?
i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all
i took my time, i hurried up
the choice was mine i didn't think enough
I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone
I never conquered, rarely came
16 just held such better days
Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside
The world was wide, too late to try
The tour was over i'd survived
I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone
I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown
Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again
You'll close it off, board it up
Remember the time i spilled the cup
Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault
I never conquered, rarely came
But tomorrow holds such better days
Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside
The world was wide, the time goes by
The tour is over, i've survived
I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone

'Adam's Song'
Blink 182

Daysleeper
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since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

3 posted 2000-05-01 03:20 PM



Son of Man-

Simple and breathtaking. The kind of poem you have to whisper under a tree... Just beautiful.

...Daysleeper...


 "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh



angel6917
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
4 posted 2000-05-01 04:15 PM


Son of Man~
This is soooooooooo cool!  I like it a lot.  Looking forward to more from you.
Love,
Kristi Lynn

rachella
Junior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 39
Indiana
5 posted 2000-05-01 05:52 PM


This is good.  I like the part "Kiss away your salty tears".  I see that as total trust.  
Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
6 posted 2000-05-01 09:50 PM


It's so sweet. I wonder if that says anything about you? When I read this I felt like crying. Keep up the good work.

Isa  

 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


lost soul
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 20

7 posted 2000-05-01 10:11 PM


your poem was breathtakingly beatiful
keep up the master pieces and i will keep reading, falling in love with you and your work more and more, handsome stranger*giggle*
luv ya
hugz and kisses

Oo0ostephanio0oO
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since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
8 posted 2000-05-02 04:39 AM


I REALLY like this one. It's awesome! Keep up the great work!
  

 (:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."


purplesunshine
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 10

9 posted 2000-05-02 02:05 PM


Darling, once again you wrote a beautiful poem.  I know you have lots of poems to post on here.....so where are they?  You are starting to get fans on here.  Well my love you know you will always be my biggest fan.
I love you!

*Mandy*

purplesunshine
Junior Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 10

10 posted 2000-05-02 02:15 PM


Oh I finally posted some of my stuff, you have already read them though.
Love you bunches  

*Mandy*



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NorthCaliGirl
Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 14
Durham, CA, 95938
11 posted 2000-05-04 07:57 PM


Okay, I think I originally read this because it had the word "nirvana" in it, even though it has nothing to do with the band...  
Anyway,... I think the poem was great. Keep up the good work, son.     No pun intended of course.    
NorthCaliGirl


[This message has been edited by NorthCaliGirl (edited 05-04-2000).]

snowgirl17
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 20
Cloquet,Mn
12 posted 2000-05-04 11:05 PM


Intresting poem
Great imagrey

 Lane C.

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