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curlyboo
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 4
keokuk, Iowa, USA

0 posted 2000-04-30 02:24 PM

                  "A Piece"
                   for TCW

             When I smile at you
               its my disguise
                trying to hide
              the pain in my eyes

              The pain that I felt
           on that unforgettable day
              the pain that I felt
              when you walked away

            When you turned to her
                instead of me
             I tried to stop you
           but you just didn't see

      Now as the weeks and months go by
       your very being haunts my mind
        in my thoughts during the day
        and in all my dreams at night

           The pain never fades
          it just isn't the same
         I miss your sweet kisses
            and the simple way
             you'd say my name

          When I see you with her
           my heart breaks in two
        the day you decided to leave
      you took a piece of it with you

           You can turn your back
            no matter what you do
       you can smile that empty smile
         but we both know the truth

         Though you may be to proud
             I will shout it out
      you can deny it through and through
             but when you left....

You left a piece of your heart with me,too.

[This message has been edited by curlyboo (edited 05-03-2000).]

DeEpMeLaNcHoLy
New Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 9

1 posted 2000-04-30 02:35 PM

Though you may be to proud
I will shout it out
you can deny it through and through
but when you left....

You left a piece of you're heart too.

**aww,thats a REALLY amazing poem you wrote** reminds me of what happened to me two nights ago. He left me! But its inspired me to write. Keep writing, its the best therapy!

heaven_legih_angel
New Member

since 2000-04-30

Posts 9

2 posted 2000-04-30 10:34 PM

Memories, Memories. it's amazing how you can find your exact thoughts and feelings written by another person who probably experienced the same dilemmas. I'm glad you wrote this, a copy of it will be sent to a very important person of my past. My heart goes out to you if you wrote this from experience, just know you're not alone!

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

3 posted 2000-04-30 10:58 PM

You are indeed not alone. So many of us have gone through this. You are a talented poet, welcome to passions!

*Krista Knutson*

"Lonliness is the human condition."
*Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"*

poe_32
Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada

4 posted 2000-04-30 11:35 PM

Wow, all the words in this poem explain how I feel right now. You've made your point so clear and I can relate to this so well. Your not alone in all of this, many people go through this kind of situation all the time. This was a very beutiful yet sad poem. I really liked it becuase I can relate to it so much. Keep writing!!!!smiles

Poe

son of man
Member

since 2000-04-25

Posts 125

5 posted 2000-05-01 12:44 PM

good poem. i especially liked the end, how original. good wording too.

Oo0ostephanio0oO
Member

since 2000-01-19

Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~

6 posted 2000-05-01 05:40 PM

This was very well-written. Im sorry to hear that your heart was broken. This EXACt thing happened to me back in February, and I'm still lost. Keep up the good work, though

(:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

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