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4eva_at_heart
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0 posted 2000-04-28 09:12 AM


footsteps echo eerily in contrast with the dark
grotesque shadows sway like midnight pantomimes against the pavement stark
mocking winds carry prominent whispers which taunt, let thou not recognise nor hark
companionship all but myself and the distance of a solitary dog's bark

ears and eyes alert to every sound and flickering shape
the silent tap of footsteps is amplified and multiply, the fear emblazoned on my face
the darkened street lay perilous, forever stretching there be no escape
my decisive thinking which overflows with fear may make the difference to my fate

breathing quickens, the cold lonely night is emphasized by the cloud of mist that passes my lips
the cold sweat that dampens my hands is sheathed by the sleeves of my coat, finding comfort in the curve of my hips
my feet falter as a hurry my pace, confidence is at a loss and the fear i feel causes me to awkwardly trip
the reality of the darkened street and the footsteps in which echo like my own wrap their spindly fingers around my throat and i can't escape the forceful grip

a darting glance to what lay behind present my eyes with a moving shadow as menacing as an oncoming storm
to what is to be of this faceless danger, is it of male and human form?
i am now a part in a sick and twisted game, a game of vegeance and evil, for i am just the pawn
but what else shall creep into my mind but pain, torment and death it's too early for me to die for i have been barely born

not much further is the door, the vortex into which my security is felt and my destiny is mine
in my pockets my hands fumble for the key to my lit world of halls and dorms, i am close enoough to read the signs
anxiety makes my head throb in a desire to run and to be free from the mysterious dark in which i am bind
instinct overpowers lessons taught of staying calm and i dash for door as the tears stream and at that moment my only friend is the solitary porch light and time

once inside the tremors cannot be calmed or ceased
nervousness is the underlying animal, insecurity and fear is the unrelentless beast
wrapped in blankets i close my eyes, the wish of melting the image of the approaching shadow, wishing for a comforting dream at least
all hope of dispelling the dark figure is lost, the fear enduced heart beats still reminders of the dependence that has been severely creased

to wake to chaos and whispering gossip amplifies the senses
news of a body found, bound, bruised, raped, talk of late night walks and consequences
dark images reoccur in my head of the faceless shadow that stalked me, i had no such defences
realisation that last night i was was walking, walking in the dark, now i stand so still and pensive

forever i will be wondering if on that fateful night destiny had me in thought
was it due to my decisive thinking or mt instinct that made me allure fate, had i unconciously fought?
i remember the shadows and the echo of my footsteps, the darkness and that shadow that lived my mind contorts
forever i will wonder was i the one who was to be delivered those intentions, was i the one they sought?



 i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known?
i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all
i took my time, i hurried up
the choice was mine i didn't think enough
I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone
I never conquered, rarely came
16 just held such better days
Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside
The world was wide, too late to try
The tour was over i'd survived
I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone
I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown
Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again
You'll close it off, board it up
Remember the time i spilled the cup
Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault
I never conquered, rarely came
But tomorrow holds such better days
Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside
The world was wide, the time goes by
The tour is over, i've survived
I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone

'Adam's Song'
Blink 182

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ESP
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since 2000-01-25
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Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-04-29 05:07 PM


Bec,

This is fantastic....you had me totally spellbound from start to end! I was terrified she was gonna get raped or murdered....what a sigh of relief I breathed when she got in safely! This is a WOW poem!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

son of man
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since 2000-04-25
Posts 125

2 posted 2000-04-29 08:22 PM


WOW! excellent!
SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 45

3 posted 2000-04-30 09:58 PM


BeC wOnderful pOem keep up the wOnderful work!! take Care!!! S&I
4eva_at_heart
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since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

4 posted 2000-05-01 06:07 AM


hey thanx guys! i actually didn't think much of it...i just wanted to post something and this was the first thing that crept into my head for some strange reason

thanx again

Bec                                 

 i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known?
i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all
i took my time, i hurried up
the choice was mine i didn't think enough
I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone
I never conquered, rarely came
16 just held such better days
Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside
The world was wide, too late to try
The tour was over i'd survived
I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone
I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown
Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again
You'll close it off, board it up
Remember the time i spilled the cup
Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault
I never conquered, rarely came
But tomorrow holds such better days
Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside
The world was wide, the time goes by
The tour is over, i've survived
I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone

'Adam's Song'
Blink 182

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
5 posted 2000-05-01 06:18 AM


Ohh yeah Bec, this is really crap!! This is such a good poem. Good choice of words and excellent description.
I agree with Lizzie that this is a WOW poem.

Brilliant.

EJ

 "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


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