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Farrah
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since 2000-04-26
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0 posted 2000-04-26 09:30 PM


Why is my life so sad why does everything happen so bad I'm so scared who is really my friend till the end

I'm scared to be hurt my heart is breaking I'm scared and shaking my tears are running down my face cuz my life is falling apart

I pray at night please don't hurt me so my life is going slow my breath is getting shorter

I'm here now but gone tomorrow boy anit that sorrow.

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son of man
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since 2000-04-25
Posts 125

1 posted 2000-04-26 10:29 PM


why such sadness?
your lyrics reach out to me.
are your words a desperate cry for help?
your sadness was relayed in this poem
just as you hoped, i'm sure.
to re-format this poem would add alot of character and in turn reach out even more
to the understanding hearts of those who feel your sadness. good job.

 

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
2 posted 2000-04-27 12:50 PM


I too ask the question, "Why such sadness?"

Everyone goes through moments like this in their lives and pull through. I feel that you will make it through too. Blue skies are around the corner

~AF~

 "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


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