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UndyingLove
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 23
Bethany, OK, USA

0 posted 2000-04-24 11:08 PM


If You'll Just Break My Heart

Don't let me love you,
Don't let me fall,
Don't let me do this,
If you'll just break my heart.

Don't let me know you,
Don't let me care,
Don't let me see you,
If you'll just break my heart.

Don't let me live
In a fantasy world.
Don't let me dream,
If you'll just break my heart.

Don't let me in
To you little world,
Don't open the door,
If you'll just break my heart.

I want to love you,
I want to care,
But I want none of this,
If you'll just break my heart.


 "Goodnight, sweet prince, and flights of angels guide thee to thy rest."
-William Shakespeare, in "Hamlet"

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4eva_at_heart
Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

1 posted 2000-04-24 11:23 PM



this poem is so easy to relate to...a fear of being hurt by someone you love is a sorta innner torment that everyone experiences.
they say it's 'part of love'
but really...can't we have the love minus the paranoia??

excellent poem...the repitition worked well and highlighted the message

keep posting

Bec

 "whenever you are feeling alone...i'll take your hand in mine and we will walk together"


UndyingLove
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 23
Bethany, OK, USA
2 posted 2000-04-24 11:55 PM


Thanks.  ) I don't know why we can't escape the paranoia.  I wish we could, and that's why this poem was written for the one I love.  I want to love him with all my heart, but I don't want to let my heart go if he is going to break it.  Why can't we trust our hearts to others without the fear of being hurt?

I like this forum, thank you for your input into my poetry.  I enjoy knowing what others think of my works.

 "Goodnight, sweet prince, and flights of angels guide thee to thy rest."
-William Shakespeare, in "Hamlet"

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-04-27 10:45 AM



~~~~~~~~nice expression in this piece~~~~~
good writing~~~~~~`


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.


sunshine17
Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA
4 posted 2000-04-27 12:39 PM


This is a very good poem that shows your emotion.  I sadly know how you feel, because I feel the same way for my boyfriend.  I guess that's because I'm so used to being the one that gets hurt all the time from guys, but anyhow, I enjoyed reading yur poem.  Keep up the good work.
son of man
Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125

5 posted 2000-04-28 02:11 AM


i understand...
is it really better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all?
i like your poem.

 

Olga
Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA
6 posted 2000-04-29 09:10 PM


I know just how u feel, this kid likes me but im afraid to open up 2 him, cuz im afraid 2 fall in love and get hurt again. Great poem, i liked it very much
ESP
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
7 posted 2000-04-30 07:38 AM


This is a lovely poem...can't say I can relate, I haven't been in love yet. I like your use of repetition, very effective. I hope the one you want to love doesn't hurt you too badly. But hey, maybe the love will be worth the pain?

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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