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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Hidden You walked through the valley of hidden trees Gracing through shadows soft as the breeze; Your dance charmed the creatures and pleased the man, Hold out your hand and allow the dove to land, It wishes to know from where it came Except you and the dove, the world is to blame. A rainbow falls from a cloud through the sky A voice bellowed from above saying she will die He had sent her so i had no control I just wished she didn't have to go I could only watch when she fell to the ground. She then departed and I heard a voice soft in tone Before me I saw the tree for a moment Then what i couldn't see was gone ---Written by:Hoppy 11-27-99 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it." Henry David Thoreau Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow!!! This made me really think! I like it alot...your style I find very good. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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MerritW Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33Texas |
This is a really good poem! I loved it. |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
I like this poem It is great! |
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Rachel8383 Junior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 44 |
This sounds very much like Thoreau's writing, I mean the transcendentalist period when all the writers felt like being one with nature. It's great, I love it!! Rachel |
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luvable New Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 9 |
this is a reallly great poem!! I look forward to reading more of your poems!! Luv oddles& oddles, Luvable |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Powerful great poem...especially the meaning. "You could be my unintended Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse "Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith "Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
hey there, thanks for the replies, you all pulled this one up from a LONG time ago. Glad to see someone read it There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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