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Carly
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0 posted 04-18-2000 01:47 PM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly

The Girl

She knows what it's like to cry herself to sleep night after night after night
She knows what it's like to sit all alone at lunchtime and only be accompanied by a small paper bag and a ham and cheese sandwich
She knows what it's like to feel inferior among her peers and invisible to the surrounding world
to be laughed at, not laughed with
and be completely misunderstood by everyone
She knows what it's like to have no one to share her deepest thoughts and emotions with
She knows what it's like to have her feelings tossed about like a worthless pile of rags
  and turn around to hear her very self-image being destroyed
She knows what it's like to roam the world aimlessly searching for something unknown to even herself
She knows what it's like to want to end it all...

Yet she knows of a different world.

She now knows what it's like to laugh herself to sleep
She now knows what it's like to sit down and have a crowd gather around her
She knows what it's like to be seen and heard by all
to laugh, really and truly laugh
and have her values and thoughts actually understood by her peers
She knows what it's like to be able to share her thoughts and emotions with someone she trusts
She knows what it's like to have her feelings valued by others
and to be spoken to, not spoken of
She knows what it's like to find what she was searching for
She knows what it's like to never want this to end

She will never forget what it was like...


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**Angel**
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1 posted 04-18-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for **Angel**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for **Angel**

Welcome to Passions! I am sure you will find this to be a wonderful place.  
You have a great piece of writing here. I adore it!
I look forward to reading more of your work.

Lindsay


Carly
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2 posted 04-18-2000 06:32 PM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly

Thanks a lot for your insight... From what I have read in the past whole day I've been here it seems that this place is a good one to be.

    ~Carly
Danny Holloway
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3 posted 04-27-2000 10:53 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~nice writing~~~~the way you have written this the expression of both perspectives is appreciated better I think.
Good work Carly~~~~~~~~~

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


4 posted 04-27-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Oh my goodness...I feel as though you just wrote a poem about me. Wow. This poem just so totally describes me! Thank you so much for sharing it with Passions! Btw, welcome to Passions!!!! I look forwad to your next post!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
MrHat
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5 posted 04-27-2000 05:28 PM       View Profile for MrHat   Email MrHat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MrHat's Home Page   View IP for MrHat

I like this poem. The beginning is sad, but I like it.

 "DO NO GO GENTLE INTO THAT GOOD NIGHT"

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men and their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Wild men who caught the sun in flight,
And learn too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.

Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

And you, my father, there on that sad height,
Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

-Dylan Thomas
rachella
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6 posted 04-27-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for rachella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachella

Carly,
  Welcome to Passions!  This was a great first poem.  I liked the contrast between the two.  There is a little bit, if not a whole lot, of each side of this girl in all of us.  Thank you for writing it.  
   ~Rachella
son of man
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7 posted 04-28-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for son of man   Email son of man   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for son of man

a great insight on how there will always be undesirable happenings, but there is always happiness. i believe happiness is worth all the sorrow in the world. you have written about many of us in this poem. i really enjoyed it. great work!


 
4eva_at_heart
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8 posted 04-28-2000 07:37 AM       View Profile for 4eva_at_heart   Email 4eva_at_heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 4eva_at_heart

this is terrific!!
Welcome to Passions....and such a great first post!!!
wow!! the double perspective worked great! i was like feeling really depressed for the girl
and having the ability to drag someone into a poem...make them feel for a character or make them live the poem...is a great achievement! well done!!  

wish to read more of you work soon

Bec

 i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known?
i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all
i took my time, i hurried up
the choice was mine i didn't think enough
I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone
I never conquered, rarely came
16 just held such better days
Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside
The world was wide, too late to try
The tour was over i'd survived
I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone
I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown
Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again
You'll close it off, board it up
Remember the time i spilled the cup
Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault
I never conquered, rarely came
But tomorrow holds such better days
Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside
The world was wide, the time goes by
The tour is over, i've survived
I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone

'Adam's Song'
Blink 182
Carly
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9 posted 04-29-2000 06:33 PM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly



   Thanksfor all of your replies! It's great to hear insight like this. I wrote this poem because I felt I needed to let out my feelings. It is written in 3rd person, but I really wrote it from 1st. Thanks again.

    ~Carly
Carly
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10 posted 04-29-2000 06:33 PM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly



   Thanks so much for all of your replies! It's great to hear insight like this. I wrote this poem because I felt I needed to let out my feelings. It is written in 3rd person, but I really wrote it from 1st. Thanks again.

    ~Carly
Carly
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11 posted 04-29-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly

   Oops, sorry about that!
bulletproof2312
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12 posted 04-30-2000 05:59 PM       View Profile for bulletproof2312   Email bulletproof2312   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bulletproof2312

:What a wonderful message... it's encouraging to know that there is someone else who has exsperianced both ways of life... when you stick in there through the hard times of being alone some of your greatest friends are found, I will never forget the people who came and pulled me out of the solitary confinement I was in... Best of Luck, and welcome to Passions, a truly wonderful place.

 "Here I stand I can do none other"---Luther
Carly
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13 posted 05-08-2000 09:59 AM       View Profile for Carly   Email Carly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carly

  I want everyone to be able to read this... so *bump*. BTW Thanks again everyone.

   ~Carly

[This message has been edited by Carly (edited 05-13-2000).]
Child of the Stars
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14 posted 05-06-2001 02:32 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked.  And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears."   ~Kahil Gibran

Allan Riverwood
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15 posted 05-06-2001 02:35 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood


I want everyone to be able to read this, so I'm going to bump it again!
*bump*
Artic Wind
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16 posted 11-15-2007 07:46 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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