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Jimmy
Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42
Oak Grove

0 posted 2000-04-16 06:36 PM



I show a smile,
but hide a frown,
I show a laugh,
try not to break down,

I act like I dont care,
But I really do,
I make it seem like it dont matter,
but im broken that were through,

I hide things from friends,
but inside i feel,
I act like your not on my mind,
how long can i deal?

I feel so free,
but i am heart broken,
I tried to talk to you,
but no words were spoken.

I will move on in my life,
but inside i will always have love,
Act like im perfectly fine,
but hoping right now i was up above.

© Copyright 2000 Jimmy VanNatta - All Rights Reserved
FlipAngel
Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46
Prior Lake, MN, USA
1 posted 2000-04-16 08:17 PM


This is a really good poem, I can almost FEEL your actual pain! But don't worry, there are plenty of other fish in the sea.  (I know that phrase is way overrused, but its true)

~Rachel

**Angel**
Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

2 posted 2000-04-17 03:46 PM


This is an excellent poem of your feelings.
I have gone through that situation before too. Be strong!
If you want to talk just email me at send_lindsay@hotmail.com

Keep posting

Lindsay

Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
3 posted 2000-04-17 06:01 PM


Very interesting. It's weird when you realize you weren't the only one in that same situation whatever it may be. Don't worry though..things will work out for the better.

Isa  

 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


AngelShell
Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
4 posted 2000-04-21 03:16 AM


Through all your poems that I have read I feel like I know you in a way.
Your love for this girl is so intense, so real, so needed in a world that has forgotten the first thing about real love that it is so sad to read that it is over between you two.
This poem I feel is one of the best I have read so far.  It was so real.

Keep on trying.

Love Always,
Shell.

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