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Jimmy
Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42
Oak Grove

0 posted 2000-04-16 06:12 PM


Last night it hit me,
something I try not to see,
As I was looking at you,
hoping you felt the feelings too.
I had flashbacks of all of our times past,
times we said I love you, times we said we would last.
Sadly to say but I have not forgot,
our first kiss, I remember the exact spot.
When I seen you,
Looking at my past dream come true,
I have to come back to reality,
face my fatilty.
I noticed something I dont want to admit,
Loving you is something I will never quit.
We dont talk anymore,
Theres no way for us to have a future in store.
I hear your voice everynight when I sleep,
It was your love that I was trying to keep.
Now looking back at the time we were as one,
You were, and still are, the reason I will wake to the sun.

© Copyright 2000 Jimmy VanNatta - All Rights Reserved
Isabelle
Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
1 posted 2000-04-17 06:17 PM


Very sweet. I'm beginning to believe that maybe you ought to show this girl these poems you've written. She would have no sense if she didn't at least read them. I've go to tell you if it was me i would be really impressed.

Isa

 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~


heart_on_sleeve
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 55

2 posted 2000-04-17 07:29 PM


Very touching poem.Words cannot express how much I loved your poem.Please keep up with your awsome work!  

LadyWolf
Junior Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 12

3 posted 2000-04-17 07:35 PM


Good Work Jimmy. You're words speak true feelings of what is the hardest thing to do.
Keep up the good work.

Under the moon,
Lady Wolf


 On the Avenue of Life,
don't forget to take
the Taxi once in awhile.

Olga
Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA
4 posted 2000-04-17 10:22 PM


Ok if u really want my opinion, i suggest  that u try to get ur mind off this grl. i understand that ulike her alot, but u cant fall into this depression. I've been there several times, when i really liked a guy and he didnt return my feelings, i would always fall in2 this stage of depression, and then irealized one thing, "A guy that'll make u cry isn't worth ur tears, and a guy thats worth ur tears will neva make u cry" This works vice versa aswell   I know its hard 2 4get a person, but u should atleast try. Good Luck                                
Rachel8383
Junior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 44

5 posted 2000-04-18 12:00 PM


A broken heart is one of the hardest things to overcome.  If she is not smart enough to see what she gave up, then you deserve someone better.  But, I really am impressed with your words, they come straigt from your heart, and thats not usual.  Good luck.
AngelShell
Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
6 posted 2000-04-21 03:10 AM


I some what dissagree with OLGA, I believe that you can't make yourself get over her, it is something that must happen in time.
Is this poem also written about Laci?

Love Always,
Shell.

Jimmy
Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42
Oak Grove
7 posted 2000-04-21 01:11 PM


All of my poems are wrote about laci
MerritW
Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33
Texas
8 posted 2000-04-21 02:19 PM


That was very good.  I also think you should your girl.  It was very sweet.  Well done.

 *Love is the only thing that keeps me sane* (Sue Townsend)

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