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AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

0 posted 2000-04-15 03:23 AM



Alone.

No one to comfort no one to share,
The undying pain which I have to bare.
Building up slowly the discomfort and rage,
Like an animal trapped, bared up in a cage.
Burning inside with uncontrollable hate,
Surrendering unwillingly to my pre-decided fate.
Dying resentfully reseeding to light,
Fading away from the cruel hurtful night.

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Tara
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
1 posted 2000-04-15 03:33 PM


This is such a sad poem.  I know exactly the pain it is describing.  It hurts so much to be alone.  I like how you rhymed and it flowed really well.  I hope to read more.  Tara
MerritW
Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33
Texas
2 posted 2000-04-21 03:22 PM


That is such a great poem.  It's sad, but I know how you feel.  

 *Love is the only thing that keeps me sane* (Sue Townsend)

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-04-21 05:07 PM


This is very good writing.  The expression is pretty powerful.  
Well done AngelShell

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
4 posted 2000-08-30 03:01 AM


Alone, no!  You are not that lucky, you're stuck with me!


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Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-11-15 07:42 PM


Enjoyed

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