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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27
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0 posted 2000-04-14 09:47 PM



Used To Be

Look at her and say what you see
Look at her and you won't see me
you'll see the brightest eyes
with love shining through
Diamond vase on her hand
Looking so shiny and new
Showing around vices of my heart
Pin me up with a poison dart
Spirit breaking through night and day
she took my heart and threw it away
Now i look at her
And i say what i see
I see a man where i used to be
--Written by: Hoppy


1-30-00  


 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it."
Henry David Thoreau

Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't live...you might die.

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
1 posted 2000-04-14 10:18 PM


This is a good piece. Very vivd and passionate. Nice work hoppy.

~AF~

 "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
2 posted 2000-04-15 10:57 PM


I agree with AF.. ^_^ good writing..

Lynne

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