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DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA

0 posted 2000-04-13 04:26 PM


The sun blooms golden in the eastern sky
A beautiful jewel so far from my eye
That lights up the world, hides the shadows
I know that I must have her, hold her, love her.

The breeze blows gently across the trees,
From the west it caresses, and embraces and frees
And brings the sweet scent of love on its wings
I know that I must have her, hold her, love her.

The moon risses, luminous in its light
A lovely orb, forever fixed in my eye
That makes me wish I could touch the sky
I know that I must have her, hold her, love her.


well, I just thought I'd share this with you all, I'm rather proud of it myself.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

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**Angel**
Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

1 posted 2000-04-13 05:12 PM


You should be proud of this poem! It is amazing. I really enjoyed it..
I would love to see more of your work.

Thank you

Lindsay

DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-04-13 05:24 PM


yeah, I've got quite a bit actualy, it is just that school has me really bussy right now.... for instance I'm writing a thesis *gag* well, anywho, I'll post more when I get a chance.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

anonymousfemale
Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
3 posted 2000-04-13 08:41 PM


Nice work DF. I liked the structure in which you wrote this. To me it appears unusual and that is what catches my eye.

The vivid descriptions made it beautiful. It is certainly something to be proud of.

Good job.

~AF~

 "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry


Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
4 posted 2000-04-14 01:35 AM


yeah, this is a wonderful poem.. and yes.. I agree there.. that it is definitely eye catching.. I like your style of writing here.. and I will read any other work u poest.. when u r not writing thesis' anyway.. ^_^

oh, umm.. what is 'frees'? I am not sure what that means, in this poem...

(risses .. --> .. rises)  

Lynne

angel6917
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
5 posted 2000-04-14 03:52 PM


Sam~
I like this one very much.  Who did you write it for?  Anyone I've heard of in any of your e-mails?  No?  Well, ummmm, e-mail me soon.  I miss hearing from you.  I miss everyone here in passions, too.  
Love ya lots,
Kristi Lynn

DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
6 posted 2000-04-14 08:08 PM


anonymousfemale
Thanks a lot, I am very proud of it.

Yu Lan
in this poem I was meaning "frees" in freeing from lonliness, of which love has done for both of us. Of course, that is what I wrote it as, it can be read as anything the reader wants to see in it.

Kristi
the awnsers are, Stacy, no, yes and I'm writing one right now to explain all that   Nice to see you back here, I've been bussy to (damn junior thesis).


 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost

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