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I Lost Her
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I Lost Her |
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Chevy New Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 6 |
As I take the note and head to class i wonder what it says. I open it and as i read my eyes fall, my heart dies, my mind turns black. I have lost her. I have lost the love that has keeped me going for so long. I lost her. |
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poe_32 Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 179Winnipeg, MB, Canada |
I know she may have broken your heart, but if she couldn't have done it by talking it out and telling you in person, then she wasn't worth it hun. She was being selfish and taking the easy way out for herself, and that shows how cold she was. Just remember that there is always someone out there who will love you the same way as you will love them, and remember true love requires patience. Never give up on faith in love. smile  Poe  |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
This is so short, but it doesn't matter because those words just sink right into your heart. It was so good. It just numbed me. I'm sorry that this happened to you. Girls suck sometimes. I know how you feel about her love keeping you going. Sometimes it feels like it's all you have and when it's gone it feels like you have nothing left to live for. But I promise you (if you haven't already found out) the hurt will go away. I hope you find a girl who actually deserves you and will talk to you if there's something wrong, not break it off in a note without even discussing anything. That was just mean and like Poe said it was cold. Good luck and excellent poem! Tara And if this isn't really something that happened to you, you can just ignore all the "emotional" stuff. but it really was good. |
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12eH7AeH6 New Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 5 |
I KNOW HOW THAT FEELS...BUT YEAH I AGREE WITH OTHERS THAT YOU MUST BE PATIENT AND YOU SHOULDN'T GIVE UP ON LOVE...I FINALLY RELIAZED IT...BUT THIS POEM IS SHORT BUT VERY TOUCHING...KEEP THEM COMING...127 |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
the poem is short but very powerful... like poe_32 said...keep in mind that there is always someone in the world who will love you unconditionally and return the love that you give...and that person isn't ya mum and i just find it so cold and unbelievable that she broke it to you in a note  *shakes head disapprovingly* i suppose she has no comprehension of what she has lost...you come across as a very dedicated and devoted boyfriend. some girl will be lucky i'm sure when they discover you all the best Bec |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is very expressive, saying alot in a few short lines. Brilliant poem! Hang in there hun, you'll find someone who really deserves you, Poe is right, that girl was cold to have done that. Good luck in finding strength to go o and be happy. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
This poem...it is so strong and so powerful. I am so sorry this had to happen. Just keep your head up and stay strong. I know how much it hurts! If you want to talk, just let me know. Lindsay |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Chevy, I'm sorry that the one you cared about so much turned out to be like this. Like the others said, girls just suck and they're very hard to understand. Try not to be sad. And just remember...that things like this happen for a reason...and the right girl out there is waiting for you. My friend just said to me the other night, that you really only have one true love. You may be "in love" with someone, but if that love doesn't last, then it just wasn't meant to be. SO keep that in mind. Because true love last forever. If you need to talk...email me. And...great poem..lol. Can't wait to read more! ~Sarah |
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