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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 271


0 posted 2000-04-08 12:14 PM


here's a little poem that happened to fall together while i was playing with words one day.  After it was done i looked at it and was like, whow.  


De Ja Vu

Like De ja vu
Wish it were through
Want it to end
The rules won't bend
I'm losing the game
Your to blame
I see your madness
I feel is constant sadness
You wish you weren't here
Pass me a beer
Watch me fade to black
She stabed me in the back
Hearts blood crosses the floor
You shut the door
My world fades away
What else can i say
We're no longer one, but two
Like de ja vu
We're through

1-13-99  



 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it."
Henry David Thoreau

Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't live...you might die.

© Copyright 2000 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-04-08 12:33 PM


Well, your play on words had exellent results!  This flows wonderfully and is very unique.  I enjoyed much!  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Isabelle
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
Indiana
2 posted 2000-04-08 12:49 PM


I agree with Alwye. Keep up the good work.

Isa  

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-04-08 11:29 AM


hey, I'm glad you wrote this, I've been here, and I think this is excellent.

Meredith

 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)


**Angel**
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since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

4 posted 2000-04-08 01:10 PM


Wow! It is a great poem. Keep it up.

Lindsay

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
5 posted 2000-04-09 09:21 AM


This is a very good poem....amazing what you can do with a play on words!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


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