Teen Poetry #2 |
Shrouded in Snowflakes |
4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
the clouds have drifted across the sky sun beams are hideously lost snow falls gently upon the earth the day has turned from warm to frost what once was known is now enveloped by the intricate snow flakes that fall the horizon has disappeared behind a descending mist the echo of the darkness calls a cloud descends upon me menacingly large and dark it strips me of my pride and dignity it takes from me my heart ripping and tearing was then not now the pain has been and soothed for now in its place is a void of emptiness the hollowness i feel is proved no longer can i protect myself from the seasons that provoke and tell cold wind and rain penetrates my body pillaging my inner spirit and morale i shiver in the snowflakes the ones that swallowed my world a final breath and surrender to the darkness the misery of another is unfurled |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Chilling poem....I like it alot. Love and hugs, Lizzie |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a really good poem Bec. I liked all the expression that you had in it. Very well done. ~AF~ |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
The expression in this poem is wonderful. I enjoy your work. Take care. Lindsay |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
c'mon guys...i was hoping on more than three replies on this....feed back would be really,...and i mean REALLY appreciated Bec |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
Your poem was wonderful, very expressive. I could almost feel the chilly air and snowfall! ) ~Rachel~ |
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Madden18 Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 18Connecticut |
This was an amazing poem. For real, it has so much emotion. Keep up the good work, I'll read more. This poem was awesome! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey, this is an amazing poem... it swirls a clear image in my mind, when I read this.. An eery poem.. I love the way you have arranged the words.. it makes the poem come to life.. just magical.. Lynne |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Extremely well done with exellent flow! And some great imagery also. Keep it up! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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