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kayli
Junior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 27


0 posted 2000-04-04 06:50 PM


once upon a time
there was a girl i hated
who wasnt "as good"
and whose ex-boyfriend i dated

she seemed such a "skank'
not hardly worth my days
but when i overcame my superiorty complex
she was "semi-cool" in many ways

we hung out once or twice
then a couple times more
next we were on the squad together
and then we were giggling on my floor

she became a part of our group,
then she became quite well known
for she became much more confident
and this change was well shown

then we got closer and closer
she became my best friend
we had boys over together
clothes to each other we would lend

then came the day
she told me of her famly problem
her moms always drunk
step dad always hits them

her new found confidence
gave her the courage to tell
and the courts came to her rescue
saved her from this hell

but i lost a good friend
who i now rarely see
because alchohol and abuse
took her from me



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kayli
Junior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 27

1 posted 2000-04-05 07:12 PM


what does "bounce to the top" mean??
DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-04-05 07:41 PM


eeke, and I thought this was a happy poem. Well, however it may be, I really feel for you, I can't really now how you must feel. If you need a friend, I'll be glad to listen, I know myself sometimes it is easier to talk to a total stranger than someone who you've known for a long time in the real world. If you don't mind me asking, did she just stop talking to you, or something else?

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.


**Angel**
Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162

3 posted 2000-04-05 09:16 PM


Lovely poem! I am sorry that you lost your friend but she is probably a lot better off now in her new found home. I wish you and her lots of happiness in the future.

Thank you

Lindsay

dazed
Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119
USA
4 posted 2000-04-06 03:06 AM


Bounce back to the top means...
everytime you get any reply's to your poetry
it bounces to the top of the page again.....
anyway nice poem but at the end does that mean your friend drinks alot now??
Dana  
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