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Jimmy Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42Oak Grove |
<div align="Center"><font face="Arial, Arial, Verdana" color="#2f2f4f" size="2">Lost Dreams Of Love my love for you will always be strong, from the first kiss, to the last play as "our song". lost in a ocean of shattered dreams, hearts torn, life ripped apart at the seams. our love was really meant to be, thats something my vision can clearly see. if it takes us going to talk to someone, i will do that, to be toghether as one. friends, you say we will work on, when will we know if we can ever go on? ive loved you for quit some time, i thought i would always call you mine. our relationship ripped apart, left alone, no where to start. i have been told i have been bad to you, your heart pushes that to be completly true. i want to go back to the us we have become, i want to go back to be refered to as one. i know you do not feel as i do, ill have to deal with that, not you. you can have the time of your life, never will i be able to call you my wife. all our dreams have begun to drown, i will forever wear a frown. from eep inside my heart, i know where we need to start. we need to start with the love we share, we need to start with our devotion and care. we will soon be as one again, be eachothers lover and friend. live happily ever after like we were meant to be, this is a dream, only seen by me. my love will not be returned, the love you had for me is now burned. i will never recover from this event, you were my angel only heaven sent. you were my one, but you now have gone away, left all alone, forever roaming astray. you were my heaven on earth, you do not know all that you are worth. my love for you will not die when i do, you have left me feeling sad and blue. my heart will never go back to norm, left shattered by this loving storm. swept away all that we had accomplished together, and to think, i though we would last forever!? this peom was wrote to the one that i love, laci, whome i have lost in these last few days. i still miss her a lot, but i have got the feeling we cant even be friends. she wants nothing to do with me anymore. Laci, I Will Always Love You Jimmy </font></div> [This message has been edited by Jimmy (edited 04-08-2000).] |
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kayli Junior Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 27 |
that ws definatly the most moving poem i have read in my three long days as a member on this thing i hope you let ur chick read this, caz im telling you if my ex wrote me soemthin liek that, i woudl run back to him in a second, i hope things work out with you and ur girl, she seems to be missing out on an awesome guy! ~kayli |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Exellent work! I too think you should let her know your feelings. It could be the difference between loosing her and gaining her back, thats for sure. Good luck and keep up the good writing! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is beautiful....you must definitely share it with that lucky lady you love!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very sweet and sentimental. It's always a pleasure to meet a guy who actually wants love and relationships over flings and sex. I'm sorry your girl failed to appreciate your feelings, but hopefully you will be able to cope, and maybe win her heart again with your beautiful poetry. *peace dude* Groggy and cold in 2nd period, Meredith *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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Jimmy Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42Oak Grove |
thanx everone for your comments, but my ex wont even talk to me. no matter what i try i cant get her out of my mind. she isnt really missing out on something, i am the one mising.  |
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Jimmy Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42Oak Grove |
please reply so i can keep this poem in the new part of the forum |
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Jimmy Junior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 42Oak Grove |
thanx for all the replies [This message has been edited by Jimmy (edited 04-16-2000).] |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
I really liked ur poem, although i sorta got cnfused cuz1st u say that u guys will be 2gether, and then u say u won't. But othat than that i really liked it. I agree w/ everyone else,that u should give her this poem, and whatever u do DON'T GIVE UP ON HER. |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Wow! I'll tell you that girl must not realize what she's missing out on. I believe she's missing out on a really good guy. If only we could find more guys like you. My theory is though to be not too pushy, being too pushy can make her not want to be around you even more. But do what you feel is best. I just wish you luck. Your a good writer. Keep up the work. If you ever want anyone to talk to i'm here just e-mail me: jenlybak15@hotmail.com Isa "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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Rachel8383 Junior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 44 |
Well, that is an amazing poem. The only thing I can say is that if it is meant to be, then it will be. If she is not smart enough to see what she is missing then she is the one missing out. If ya'll are meant to be one, then ya'll will, just let it happen, no matter how long it takes, unless you find someone else who you can give your love to. Then she will be the one missing out. Good luck in love. -Rachel |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
This is an excellent poem. I think you should keep trying if you love her. Be strong! Lindsay |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow, I think that's all I can say. I have recently begun to read all of your work, I read "Goodbye" and "I try" I think that you are an excelent poet with a hard life. I myself are longing to be needed as much as you need your laci. Maybe things will work out, maybe they won't, but never the less, you tried. Never give up trying. And never give up writing, the world needs a poet like you. Love always, Shell. |
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