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poe_32
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0 posted 2000-04-01 09:23 PM



A Lost Cause

Our time together,
reminds me how happy I was,
where nothing could bring me down,
my memories of us,
are only memories now,
those memories make me cry,
wanting to have it all back,
but time has taken it away,
I'm slowly dying,
dying from my darkening sadness,
the sadness that turns me blind,
makes me deaf to the words of love,
and locks me up in a chest,
my soul is locked away,
and I'll never be the same again,
I've lost all hope,
hope to see another day,
a day where I can smile,
I'am nothing but empty now,
with nothing to look forward to anymore,
don't try to talk to me,
because all words mean nothing to me,
don't try to feel sorry for me,
because no pity can take it all away,
and end all the pain,
a pain that lives inside you,
deep down in your heart,
sometimes if you listen,
you can hear my heart breaking,
forget me,
for I'am nothing but a lost cause.



 

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Bjarnason - All Rights Reserved
Michele
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since 2000-04-01
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1 posted 2000-04-02 04:03 AM


Aawww......please don't feel like a lost cause.I know what you are feeling,though. Sometimes,if I too am quiet,I swear I could hear my heart breaking,as well.You do express your feelings well,though.Thank you, for it is a lot clearer to me now,I am not alone in this feeling.
Keep writing,
Michele

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
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Limbo
2 posted 2000-04-02 04:10 AM


This is interesting that you find yourself to be a lost cause. Just remember that you will eventually find a person who you share a mutual respect and love for. So don't feel like a lost cause because whatever is lost can always be found again.

This is a good expressive piece and I hope that you like your time here with Passions.

~AF~

 What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger



ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2000-04-02 07:23 AM


You are not a lost cause...you will find someone who is equally grateful to find you. I hope that happens soon. If you need me, you know where to find me.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


Jessica182
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since 2000-03-20
Posts 15

4 posted 2000-04-02 06:18 PM


That poem is very good, I write about the same situations.. very deep  
Angel
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2000-04-02 08:55 PM


This was simply awesome. I am going through the same situation right now, and you expressed my feelings better than I ever could. If you ever need someone to talk to, I am here too. Again, your poem was amazing.

~Remember to keep smiling  . Things will get better soon


 ~Susie~



Zach
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since 2000-04-02
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6 posted 2000-04-02 10:02 PM


I know exactly how you feel man. you just gotta deal and go on. the same thing has just happened to me and i don't know what i'm gonna do, but i'm gonna make it. i know it sucks, and i just wanted to tell you that you're not alone, and I know how you feel.
poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
7 posted 2000-04-05 12:43 PM


Thanks for all your replys guys.
Crystalina123
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

8 posted 2000-04-05 10:22 AM


Poe,
Welcome to passions. I"m not sure if you feel that love is a lost cause or you are a lost cause. Either way, I find it hard to believe that's true. Look at it this way, if things are that bad then they can only get better -- right?

Crystal

P.S. Great poem!

 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

poe_32
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 179
Winnipeg, MB, Canada
9 posted 2000-04-06 08:08 PM


Actually this is another poem about a old relationship I had with my ex-boyfriend a long time ago. But I don't feel like that anymore. Thank you all so much for reading my poetry and replying, I really appreciate your imputs. Thanks again!!!!!!Passions Poe
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