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The strong bond of love
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The strong bond of love |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I saw you in the street, Twas the first time our eyes met. I knew suddenly from that moment, My heart to you was set. The rest of the world melted, Away to nothing I knew. Everything as I knew it was gone, For all I could see was you. I tripped, I smiled, I'm so glad you smiled back. My nervousness faded, My life now had colour instead of black. All I can think about now, Is the next moment we're together. The way that I feel about it, Is why we are meant to be together. My love for you can never deminish, It is a never ending flow. My feelings and heart, Are things I would only to you show. Your cheezy lines make me laugh, But it's cute that you try. You can even make me smile, When I can do nothing but cry. I can't ever see us splitting, For the bond is too strong. All that I know is that feelings like this, Are hardly ever wrong. I am sorry about the flow and rythym in this poem but I just couldn't get it tonight.  |
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*Nene* Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 16 |
Don't worry about the flow cuz the words and the tone of the poem make up for it. I'm kind of at that point right now. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Ah, a beautiful poem, if I do say so myself, flow is a little off, but that really dosn't matter, the words more than make up for any real problem. And again, it is a very nice poem, and man it is good to be back. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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heart_on_sleeve Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 55 |
What a colorful and gorgeous poem!Love can approch you where you least expect it. Heart_on_sleeve     |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
and you told me today this was crap! it is good! strong use of words!! good joB!!! Bec |
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dazed Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119USA |
Good work!! Im in the same situation now!! Dana |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a lovely poem, forget the flow! The words and the feelings totally make up for that.I hope the person you wrote it for can feel the love you express in this poem. I hope you and that person can find happiness together, you deserve it! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Thanks everyone for your replies. I hope everyone who was at the stuck situation got out of it ~AF~ What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger |
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