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The power from within
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The power from within |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
The power from within Have you ever stopped to feel Your veins beneath your skin They are the essence of your movement They are your power from within If you think about it long enough You can trace them to your brain But take my warning and do not think It will make you go insane You will start to feel your heartbeat Louder, louder it will get until no longer can you focus And no longer can you forget You try to go out in public To get away from all the strain But in every person, all you see Are those wretched, evil, veins Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Wow, this is awesome! I can so see what you are saying. Wonderful poem, I'm very impressed. You rock. *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I'm impressed too this was great tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a great poem. I liked the nice even flow that you had through it......you've got me paranoid about veins now....  ~AF~ |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
ack! this poem is like beyond great! i love it!! and i understand the message  wonderful work! enjoy the praise! lolphew..wow! BEc |
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Mellon Collie Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49united states of america |
dear lucius, as i noted on your other work "i cry out in vain" this is absolutely superb writing. i'm actually getting to be a bit jealous *heh*. i love the shift in this poem in line 7 and the way that it gets more dramatic as it draws towards the ending. a very solid and well-crafted poem. of course, for me it's always been the sound of footsteps *heh* if i get the rhythym in my head then i'm lost until i manage to find solitude *heh*. sincerely, the beautiful freak |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
WOW!!!!!!! |
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