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KiKi
Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 15


0 posted 2000-03-18 11:10 PM


just tell me why
why do you lead me on
i just want to cry
i just want you gone

just look into my eyes
and tell me the truth
please tell me no lies
please do this for me

you say I can tell you anything
anything at all
but when I do
you seem as you don't care

you say I am your best girlfriend
and that i will be-
be until the end
it doesn't seem that way to me

I want something more
I want you to be mine
but you just shut your door
just please tell me the truth

do you want something more
or do you want to run and hide
hide behind that great door
I am sick of waiting

just tell me
right here right now
could there ever be
a you and me?

 *if you love someone let them go, if they return their love was yours, if they don't their love wa never yours to begin with*

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LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
1 posted 2000-03-19 04:25 PM


You wrote this with such earnest passion, you must be like me, always wanting more out of life than I have.   I like how you ended this with a question, it leaves me with an aura of hope, like you haven't quite givin up. Good job.

 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)


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