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The Girl I Just Can't Have
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The Girl I Just Can't Have |
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KidS128111 Junior Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 13Northern California |
It Starts out as a small crush Before they were just innocent smiles and hugs I’d take you out whenever you wanted We were well “Just Friends” I saw how he treated you I heard people talkng about it And it hurt me that he would hurt you so much All I wanted to do was help you Lift you out of the deep sadness you felt And then as I tried to lift I fell for you The night I was taking you home I remember like it was yesterday Boom! There was a noise that made you feel scared Then you hid your face from me Ashamed of the tears falling from your pretty brown eyes Then you removed your hands from your face And I swear it was like looking at an angel At that moment I saw in your eyes something that I’ve never seen before I started realizing who you were and what I wanted But I was very hesitant and I admit I was scared I questioned myself and wondered “Why would she even think about being with me?” She is so beautiful and caring and just everything that I wanted In the past love and relationships in my life haven’t always been the best But I knew that I had to tell you somehow, that I felt this way for you I could’ve told you at the dance but I was preoccupied I felt so guilty and really came down on myself I came with you, but I spent more time on a turntable than with you I’m very sorry for being such a bad date that night Christmas in the Park was where I planned on telling you Throughout the night I tried getting close to you I kept on waiting for you to say you were cold or something I was so shy around you There was no way I could even get the words I wanted to say to you out of my mouth So I wrote the letter Hidden in the red stocking with the teddy bear As I pulled into a parking lot I was so nervous Pretending that my car could not go on I said, “I need to check the back, I know what’s wrong” Then opened the trunk and went for it I called you to the back of my car for help with As you came around I grabbed the stocking and the bear with letter stuffed and gave it to you I saw you smile and your face filled with shock I was happy that I could make you feel that way All that was going through my head was, “Kiss her stupid!” but I was too stupid and did not I then dropped you off and gave you a hug goodbye She did not see the letter yet I poured my heart out in that letter I told her how I loved everything about her and how I felt How her smile can brighten my day How just being around her made me feel good And just how beautiful I thought she was Honestly I kind of was hoping that she didn’t read it because what if she just totally laughed at me Down in the bottom of my heart I was praying she’d embrace my feelings with the same feelings of her own I am not exactly sure when she read the letter but when she did I was deeply touched by her reaction It made her cry She said it was one of those happy cries Like your happy and your sad You Got to live through it to know it Then she wrote me one of the best letters I’ve ever had the pleasure of reading It touched me in a way that only she could The way it got to me is probably the coolest thing She drove to my house (no license) In the middle of the night and gave it to me personally Before this I didn’t know if she cared about me I was unsure of her feelings But she had to feel something for me right? The tears she cried, the letter, and the way she delivered the letter Am I stupid or are those hints of affection? At the time I started thinking that she liked me Maybe not a lot but a little If she’d only open herself up When I talk to her it’s like she’s holding back I know there’s more to her than what she lets people know Under all the intuitions you might have about her there’s a whole ‘nother person there Hidden and secluded from you, but dying to get out She might’ve opened up once We once had a talk at Fair Oaks Park in the middle of the night on the swings That day I thought she was mad at me When she’s like upset she takes walks So when I finally built up the guts to go I went looking for her I walked everywhere just hoping to find her and tell her all that I wanted to say I did see a figure in the distance When it started getting close I thought it was her Then something came over me and I started crying Crying for various reasons Extreme happiness, guilt, I don’t know As the figure got closer I realized it wasn’t her... Sorry it's not done yet... I got a whole lot more to put down... please give me back your feedback |
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CJM New Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 7 |
Not bad, not bad at all. I have recently experienced this situation almost exactly, minus all the details, and it seems nearly impossible to deal with. I would like to know how it turns out so keep posting. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
I like it. Come on, I want to know who it all worked out. This poem is addicting  Very nice. Welcome to passions."Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. |
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Elilas Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 20The Dalles, Oregon, USA |
I agree vary adicting i cant wait to read the End Steven |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is such a moving tale, but don't leave us hanging!! Complete this ASAP! *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
i hate you so much jk i hate getting left hanging ike that its good so far though "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
ooooo you bad person you. It is not nice to leave the readers in suspense like that!! lol Complete it quickly for I like what I have read and wish to see the end Good work so far... ~AF~ |
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KiKi Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 15 |
Don't leave us hanging write out the rest of it!!! it is great I want to know the end!!!! *if you love someone let them go, if they return their love was yours, if they don't their love wa never yours to begin with* |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
IMPATIENTLY AWAITING THE END HERE!!! So far, so good, though. Just hurry up and finish, huh?! Thank you. ~Kristi Lynn  |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
More like a story than a poem but beautiful just the same. So do you get her? Does love win out??? -- Crystal "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all." It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence. Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen. I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits. |
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KidS128111 Junior Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 13Northern California |
This is the author of this poem. Sorry to leave all you guys on a cliffhanger, but i'm having trouble put into words what happened in the end. It's pretty sad, so post what you think happened and I'll try to finish the real story A.S.A.P. djkidspinz@cs.com |
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