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jytree
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0 posted 2000-03-17 10:39 AM


Darkness falls,
So I dismade.

I am afarid,
Afarid of going out into the day.

Why oh why am I this way,
Made to be afarid of the day.

Maybe oh maybe I can fit in
But probually they will lock me in the looney bin.

This is what I face eveyday
This is a good reason to be afarid.

Day or night I hunt or sleep.
I pray they never find me.
For if they find me I will awake and say oh "BLEEP"

I will run so fast I feel like forest gump.
Pray and hope I am not killed in the city dump.

For you see,
I want to die with dignety.

More or less I want my last breath not to smell like garbage.


In the distance all I here is run forest run.



 For when day turn to night I am still there
The fallen angel jytree

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jytree
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1 posted 2000-03-17 10:42 AM


I tried to be serious but it did not work so I goofed off and made it funny.


 For when day turn to night I am still there
The fallen angel jytree

angel6917
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
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2 posted 2000-03-17 10:45 AM


It doesn't have to be serious to be a good poem,
I liked it,
and nothing else matters.
Oh, sorry, It does,
but hey,
I'm just here-
ummmmmm, sorta.
~Kristi Lynn

DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
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3 posted 2000-03-18 12:14 PM


Very nice poem. And who cares if it is serious or not?? I write goofy poems now and then, though they always turn out odd . . . Maybe I'll post one of them later this day.
LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
4 posted 2000-03-18 01:02 PM


It was a serious topic spoken with humor, at least that's how I read it. Your overall idea came accross as well as it would have through melancholy phrases. I give you a thumbs up.  

 *There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
(by me)


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