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ezt
Junior Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 19


0 posted 2000-03-16 07:38 AM



I´d do anything to turn back time
so that I could make it work for you and I
in any possible way
I wanna be with you everyday

when I´m reaching out to hold you
you push me away
it makes me all confused
but I know just what to do

Tell you does three magic words
release all your hurts
make your every wish come true
I´d do anything for you




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Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
1 posted 2000-03-16 11:23 AM


Not sure those three words will always work magic if the person they are spoken to does share the same feelings.  If someone is pushing you away, doesn't sound as though there is reciprocal feelings.  Just some observations, if the situation is real.

You have made a good effort with this poem. Welcome to Passions.

Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-03-16 01:03 PM


Welcome to Passions.   I have to agree wityh Danny's observations. If you are being pushed away then maybe you need to take a closer look at the relationship. I hope to read more of your work.  
angel6917
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
3 posted 2000-03-16 03:55 PM


I wish I could help you with your situation, because I've been there and I know how much it hurts.  Sorry, but I don't know what to tell you that Marilyn and Danny didn't already say.  I can say that I'll try my best to be there if you want me to be, and be a friend to you...
Welcome to Passions, and I look forward to more from you in the future.
~Kristi Lynn

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