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emptyness
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

0 posted 2000-03-14 10:45 PM


burning like fire
burning like the sun
burning like acid
burning like my soul
how can i stop it

freezing like ice
freezing like the wind
freezing like artic water
freezing like my soul
how can i stop it

warm like the pool water
warm like the grass
warm like a steam bath
warm like a hug
i finally stopped it

you helped me stop it
we stopped it
thank you


 "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write


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DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
1 posted 2000-03-14 11:10 PM


I like it. It is interesting and unique.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.


Ashiraladoni
Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 52
Duluth, MN, USA
2 posted 2000-03-14 11:10 PM


Great poem! I loved it! Keep up the good work!
~Ashiraladoni


 " To be free, or to be enslaved, that is the question."

dazed
Member
since 2000-03-13
Posts 119
USA
3 posted 2000-03-15 02:13 AM


I like your work!!
you got a great mind!!
This poem is cool cause it really i dunno its just creative!!



 

4eva_at_heart
Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

4 posted 2000-03-15 02:27 AM


this is very creative and original
keep up the great work

Bec

NewbiePoetGuy
Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 13
Thousand Oaks, Ca, USA
5 posted 2000-03-15 02:31 AM


hey, really good poem, it was definately unique i wish i had the creative mind you do anywayz good luck
angel6917
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
6 posted 2000-03-15 01:58 PM


I like this poem,
it's something different,
original, and unique.
Keep up the good work.

~Kristi Lynn

pharon
Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
alabama
7 posted 2000-03-15 05:26 PM


good job!!!  you are really a very talented writer    
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