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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2000-03-11 09:14 PM


you used to be my friend,
now you are a bore.
Talking about crap,
And becoming a whore.

You used to be my friend,
But now all you do is lie.
Making up things about other guys,
And how great it would be to die.

You used to be my friend,
Great secrets we had shared.
Talking for hours non stop,
You acted like you cared.

You used to be my friend,
I thought our bond was so strong.
But seeing you in the light,
I realised I couldn't 'ave been more wrong.

You used to be my friend,
We had memories happy and sad.
But the ones that linger in my head,
Will be the bad ones that we had.


This is dedicated to a person that I thought I knew...

© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Johnson - All Rights Reserved
Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-03-12 01:27 AM


Be careful about the language.  But anyway, we all have some friends that change and that closeness is broken.  I'm sur eyou two had wonderful times together.  Always just keep that in mind, not the rest.  Nice poem.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-03-12 01:42 AM


I don't even know what to say other than that I can't imagine how you must feel. I've lost friends to death, to lies and betrayel, but we have never really just drifted apart. Well, I guess that dosn't really matter. Anywho, I hope that things work out.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind. ;)

AngelDust
Junior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 30
Minnesota
3 posted 2000-03-12 11:44 PM


As a new fan of your work, I must say that it's reality is what strikes me about it.  The way you describe the pain it causes is amazing.  It seems as if you can identify with anyone.  I've also lost friends, mostly due to drifting apart and betrayel, and have felt the same way.  As I've said in responce to a few of your other poems, cheer up!  Things will get better.
anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
4 posted 2000-03-13 03:53 AM


Thanks everyone for your comments. Some of my work may be a little bit more cheery from now on as I have moved into a big cloud of happiness.

Once again thanks.

dazed
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since 2000-03-13
Posts 119
USA
5 posted 2000-03-13 05:24 AM


Great work rhymes and has a rhythm    
hope i dont sound like an idiot hahaha im pretty new at this i just registered tonight

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