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pharon
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since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
alabama

0 posted 2000-03-08 02:39 AM


Acceptance/Refusal

Hello and welcome to our show.
Tonight we'd like to recognize
Those who have survived.
Their dreams,
Their nightmares,
Their youth.
Those who have succesfully
Molded themselves into adults.
      STOP!!!!
   I'm sorry, this can't go on
   Something needs to be said
   Who's molding who,
   Us or you?
   Yes, we've shaped ourselves,
   Into what you wanted.
   You built the molds
   We just poured ourselves in
   'Skinny' ones in this stack,
   'Fat' ones in that stack.
   Where'd you put the 'freaks'?
   Ooh - not so close to the 'geeks'!
   Now where'd the 'rich' pile go?
   Still stealing from the 'poor'?
   This needs to stop!
   What will you do
   If the molds break?
   I'm so sorry,
   Have I ruined your night?
   Yes I know it's "our night"
   But who are you trying to fool?
   Take one out of the old mold
   Put it up on stage,
   Let it tell
"...How much we've loved it here..."
"...How much we've grown..."
   Now don't stop there,
   Didn't you forget something?
   Tell how
"...You've helped us mold
ourselves into better people..."
   What?!?
   Please sit down?
   Why...I'm not disrupting
   This peaceful masquerade, am I?
   Well, I'm sorry, but
   I'm not so used to your mold
   I don't have walls around ME
   YOU have no control


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i'm not quite through yet -- but i just needed to get this out, i know it's a little long - sorry  

© Copyright 2000 maria g robinson - All Rights Reserved
angel6917
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
1 posted 2000-03-08 10:42 AM


I liked this so far, even though it is long.  It's something that I agree with, that I've been thinking for a long while.  Keep up the good work.  I can't wait to see the rest of it...
~Kristi Lynn  

Paul Hoekman
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since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
2 posted 2000-03-08 02:03 PM


You seem to be concern about
so many molds and
so many molders
and trying to break out of the mold.
There is only one mold
UNBROKEN and PERFECT
which we should all want
and try to conform to
the only one that truly matters
and by now I hope you've guessed it
JESUS!
Happy Ash Wednesday!

pharon
Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251
alabama
3 posted 2000-03-08 02:25 PM


angel--thank you so much for responding! it's encouraging to know that what i'm writing really does relate to people :>
--
paul...i know that Jesus is the only mold we should try to fill   the point of this poem is to TRY to express how pointless all the 'molds' society put forth really are. thanks for your input  

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