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sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

0 posted 2000-03-02 11:14 AM

This is written for Aaron, because I wish I knew what to say to you........

I look into your eyes,
trying to see,
past the pain,
past the sorrow,
Yet I'm so unsure of what I see.

I listen to your words,
trying to hear,
past the saddness,
past the confusion,
Yet I'm so unsure of what I hear.

I touch your skin,
trying to feel,
past the doubts,
past the loneliness,
Yet I'm so unsure of what I feel.

And all I know is that,
I need you,
to be here with me,
And yet I'm so unsure....

Danny Holloway
Member Elite

since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

1 posted 2000-03-02 06:59 PM

This peom is excellent. So unique in the style and lyric. The structure is easy to read and it flows.
Very nice! "to see, to hear, and to feel"

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

2 posted 2000-03-03 04:10 PM

Thank you. I tried but I thought that it wasn't very good.

Tara
Member

since 2000-02-21

Posts 76
Minnesota

3 posted 2000-03-03 05:40 PM

i really liked this poem. something about it just attached me to it. i'm printing it off and putting it with my favorite poems i have ever read or written. good work and thanx

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2000-03-04 07:17 PM

Gina this is beautiful...

But I'm so unsure of what to say
to help you out is all I pray
But still I'm unsure of what to do
I'll try to help get you through

I'll e-mail you soon LoL tracie

Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

5 posted 2000-03-04 09:29 PM

hey, I think you did a good job on this. Is the dude going through hard times or something? Anyway, good luck with all this...

"The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

6 posted 2000-03-05 03:01 PM

Thank you all for the nice replies. As for Aaron, I still don't know what's up? But oh well, I guess!

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