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Teen Poetry #2

No Other Eyes

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

0 posted 2000-02-29 03:55 PM

Look into my eyes,
Can you see my pain.
Pain caused by you,
Of not being true.
You said you loved me,
But you must have lied,
Because you're not with me anymore.
You said that you cared,
so why do not now?
Why can't we work this out?
Why can't you follow your heart,
Back to me?
Why can't you see that I love you
and only you,
no other.

[This message has been edited by sunshine17 (edited 03-05-2000).]

hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

1 posted 2000-02-29 04:18 PM

Wow, it is quite depressing. The eyes hold so much. Sometimes you can see things in the eyes of those you love that they cannot. I think that a good title for this poem might be "No Other Eyes". It is a very nice poem. Very nice.

~hailfellow

Tara
Member

since 2000-02-21

Posts 76
Minnesota

2 posted 2000-02-29 09:49 PM

This was so sad, almost mad me cry. I agree with hailfellow's idea for the title is good. Really good poem, heart-breaking. ~Tara

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

3 posted 2000-03-05 03:07 PM

Thnak you both very much. I like the title that you have given me. Again thank you!

Paul Hoekman
Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>

4 posted 2000-03-05 09:56 PM

You are all right,
the title really completes
this, nice work!

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

5 posted 2000-03-06 02:08 AM

Gina they have given this a great title

the poem was beuatiful but soo sad, I think you need to give him time...LoL tracie

Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

4eva_at_heart
Member

since 2000-02-12

Posts 238

6 posted 2000-03-06 02:16 AM

ack! this is so sad

you still care for him though he has caused this pain? you really must care for him....and those you care for you must never let go of

nice poem

Bec

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

7 posted 2000-03-06 03:43 PM

Thank you all for the replies. Yes I care a lot for Aaron. -gina

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