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hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

0 posted 2000-02-28 11:31 PM

Sorry that this, being my first post, must be so bad. Actually, my stuff doesn't get much better than this. Oh well. Enjoy.

Sing one last time, love,
That song you know so well,
That one you sing for me.
Day grows dim, love,
Though noon burns high.
It is darkness of the mind
With brightness in the sky.
Remember the days love?
Memory stings the heart.
The past lives on in you, love.
Soon I must depart.
The silence beckons, love.
Stay it with your voice,
That one you sing for me.

Stay with me awhile, love.
Hold me as I go to sleep.
A sleep of silence, love.
Sing your song to me.
Remember, we held hands.
You still hold my heart.
That past lives on in you, love.
Soon I must depart.
One more goodbye, love.
One more parting kiss.
No more tears for me, love.
I cannot see you cry.
Now the lullaby, love,
That one you sing for me.

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

1 posted 2000-02-29 12:39 PM

hailfellow: actually this is quite good for a first post... i'm incredibly impressed and am looking forward to reading more of your "mediocre" work

sincerely,
jerome the mysterious priest

Disarm you with a smile
And leave you like they left me here
To wither in denial
The bitterness of one who's left alone
--[billy corgan]--

hailfellow
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 28

2 posted 2000-02-29 07:19 AM

Thanks, jerome, I think I will post a couple more in the future.

sincerely,
hailfellow

sunshine17
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA

3 posted 2000-02-29 11:09 AM

Wow! That's really good. I think that was a great poem for your first post. Keep up the good work.

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

4 posted 2000-02-29 12:24 PM

What can I say that hasn't been said yet? I know...Welcome to Passions! I was kind of nervous with my first post, also. But the people here made me think that writing it was worth it. I thank them all!

Again, welcome!

stay cool

~~Lavada~~

"For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it.
For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it
For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin

Danny Holloway
Member Elite

since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

5 posted 2000-02-29 12:45 PM

I think your peom is quite good. I especially like the line "memory stings the heart".
If this is your first, it's a great start.
Continue writing. You have a talent here.

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