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Goodbye |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
I'm sorry if I broke your heart I hope you know I care We shared so many things together Nothing else could compare I hope you know I love you Even though this is the end I still need you in my life You'll always be my friend I'm really going to miss you When you're not here each night Without your hugs and kisses I just won't feel right I know that you don't want this But I don't know what to say I want you to be happy Even if I'm not with you each day Someday you'll find a new love Who'll take the place of me And I can guarantee you I'll be jealous as can be If we were meant to be together Fate will make that be This makes me feel so selfish Like I'm only thinking about me I hope that my decision Isn't a big mistake What if I regret this It'll be too late I hope that you don't hate me I don't expect anything from you You've given me so much Taught me things I never knew You were a wonderful boyfriend And you are the sweetest guy That makes it even harder To tell you one last goodbye |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Its hard saying good bye....You have written this well. Good job There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I am one of those selfish people whom it hurts to say goodbye to my first love. I am not yet to the point of wishing them complete happiness without me, as your poem expresses, but one day I hope to reach the point of your poem. I'm going to print up this poem and hang it by my computer so that every time I look at it I can be reminded as to how I hope to one day feel. Good work. "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive. Because when you love someone you control their version of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact, not their true situation at all. |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
I think you have written a very good poem. Yet I know how it feels to be the one on the other end reading and feeling the way the guy does in your poem. I think you did a good job of expressing your feelings and emotions. You're a really good poet. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Hi this poem seems to tell the honest truth. Good Job...only one question if you seem to love atleast like this "wonderful" guy why did u go and break his heart? Im not critizing you im just curious. Good Luck finding someone who makes you happy. Just keep one thing in mind along the way a broken heart hurts...trust me i know. Ive been your oppiste place before! *Lisa*  |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Tara, Everything happens for a reason. And like you said, if you were meant to be together, something will bring you to that point again. Good luck finding the one! And I hope that you are able to keep your friendship with this other guy. ~Sarah |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
Thanx for all the comments. Just to fill you in about the poem a little more. I was with this guy for a year and seven months and we had a lot of good times and some bad times to. I almost felt like I was being suffocated being 16 years old and practically married to this guy. We really loved each other but we had been fighting for almost a month and we couldn't resolve anything. It was always me compromising what I thought and i realized that that's not what a good relationship is. i'm sorry to all of you who have been on the recieving side of this, but remember that both people get hurt, not just the one who got dumped. and thanx again for the nice comments. |
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babychicken_1 Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 11 |
Well I really liked your poem a lot. I am sixteen and my first love was with my boyfriend Ricky. We went out for a year and a half and we broke up last summer. We've been back together for three monthes this year and its wonderful because I've always loved him. But your poem really describes how hard it is to love someone you always argue with and are hurt by. It also shows how difficult it is to say goodbye to someone you love and care about. You did a really good job! |
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