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another absolute nowhere..... |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
the obscene revulsion the same twisted thing again if it was free..it still couldnt end confined in me my new found superficial enemy starts pumping those juices again look at whats pretty.. lets examine what we call fair treat you with whats left of me but still find the change of heart leads to an absolute nowhere..... |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
great poem, i'm not totally sure of everything you meant by it but i think i got most of it. i do like the "let's examine what's fair" line one thing i would suggest is fixin' the next to last line a bit with the wording, i got a little tripped up there. maybe something like "still finding this change of heart" other than that i like  keep good poems coming"If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. |
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