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sunshine17
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since 2000-01-20
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Bonduel, WI USA

0 posted 2000-02-23 04:06 PM


Look deep into my eyes
Tell me do you see what lies,
underneath in a place no other can find
A place where our hearts intertwine,
A place carefree and full of joy
Where our love floats beyond the sky
I nyour arms is where I long to be
With your fingers gently caressing my face
And your warm strong arms wrapped around me tight
Above the stars queitly watching the moon in the
sky during the night.
But this is a world that only exists in my mind....

© Copyright 2000 Gina - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-02-23 10:58 PM


I can definitely relate....I can also see that place so vividly in my mind.  Exellent work, keep it up!  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~


sunshine17
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 89
Bonduel, WI USA
2 posted 2000-02-24 03:51 PM


Thank you.  I wrote this poem and most of all the rest for my old boyfriend Aaron.  I just wish I could give it to him and that he's see that we could and still can work things out.  But I guess until that day, I'm just gonna have to settle with writing poems.
Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
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3 posted 2000-02-24 04:53 PM


That's definatly beautiful. You're really good. It was so sweet and touching and just great!! Great job!

Salma

 "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders."

Angela16
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since 1999-11-19
Posts 37
USA
4 posted 2000-02-24 06:55 PM


I like this poem, it was writen really well! Great job.

 Angela

sunshine17
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since 2000-01-20
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Bonduel, WI USA
5 posted 2000-02-25 12:35 PM


Thank you very much.  
angel6917
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
6 posted 2000-02-25 02:12 PM


Gina, what can I say, whether you believe it or not, your poetry is wonderful.  Keep it up, and I hope you remember that I'm here for ya, babe.
Kristi Lynn    

Oo0ostephanio0oO
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7 posted 2000-02-25 08:09 PM


Nice work! I liked this one, alot. I can relate to it, as well as, how you feel about your X.

 (:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."


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