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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I posted this in OP#6..I hope ya'll don't mind if I post it in here too!  I will always remember When our hearts came together Of the time we spent in that place We can truly say forever I lie here thinking of you And remember your gentle kiss People think we are crazy, But it can't get better than this We were two, But now we are one Not wanting what we did To ever be undone Never to let die Those cold and lonely coals We came together Setting afire and combining our souls verdict please..lol stay cool  ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
scg: actually, i think this is one of your best pieces yet... it's poetic, deep, and thought-provoking... good work  sincerely, jerome the melancholy priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Wow... I agree. This is one of your better works. It had so much emotion and deep thoughts placed into it. Great job! "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This is an excellent peom. Such deep expression, and maybe one of the best definitions of Love I have read. Nice work! Danny |
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potrygirl Junior Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 23Peoria, Arizona, United States |
I Loved it. I just joined but have read some of your other work and I believe I like this one the best of those. -Stacye- |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I must echo everyone else's reaction, this was very well done! Keep up the good work! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks all! Gee, is this really the best one out of all of them? Wow...I don't know what to say... (for once)stay cool ~~Lavada~~ |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Hey SCG..that was beautiful..tho i havent read much of your work .. guess i read the right one at the right time..huh? wink*faith |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Faith...I really appreciate it! Stay cool ~~Lavada~~ [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 02-21-2000).] |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
that was a great poem it totally tells a story of love and friendship. i feel that same way for another yet his feelings are a mystery, but the time that we were together i can honestly say that we both flet that same way as your poem describes. |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
that was a great poem it totally tells a story of love and friendship. i feel that same way for another yet his feelings are a mystery, but the time that we were together i can honestly say that we both flet that same way as your poem describes. |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks Sunni Do you mind if I call you that??? stay cool ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
*BUMP*  |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Lavada~ I chose to read another one of your wonderful poems, and I must admit that this one is one of your best ones. You'd better not be at a loss for words, though, because it's soooooo unlike you!!  ~Kristi Lynn |
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Sara Junior Member
since 2000-02-24
Posts 27LaCrosse WI, United States |
I have to agree with everyone else. This poem was done extremely well. I love how you described the feeling. |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Kristi--I would say it, but I won't! Sara-- Thanks! stay cool ~~Lavada~~ "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin |
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