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Can Anybody Hear me??????

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Allysa
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0 posted 02-15-2000 04:45 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

Can you hear me,
when I cry at night?
Can you see me,
when I do whatt isn't right?
Can you love me,
if I'm in so much pain?
Or if you loved me,
would it be in vain?
Can you see me,
my heart is sore?
Can you see,,
I can't take any more.
Can everybody see,
my battered, broken heart?
Can everyone at one point,
be ripped apart?
Can I,
be hurt again?
This time will it be,
you, my friend?

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Oh my! I can't help myself, I'm soo mad! I was already sad that I didn't have a Valentine, then my friend takes Eric, the only person I care about away. Sad sad day. Aghhhh.

 Loves may seem forgotten, but the true will once shine through.
© Copyright 2000 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
sandgrain
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1 posted 02-15-2000 05:12 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

I can hear you. God can feel your pain.  You do have a Valentine.  Read my posting 'Have You Read Your Valentine?' in Spiritual Journeys forum.  Things will get better.
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 02-15-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Would a "real" friend take the only person you cared about?  
This was painful to tell, but well done anyway.
D
Salooma
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3 posted 02-15-2000 05:20 PM       View Profile for Salooma   Email Salooma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Salooma

This poem was great and I feel like that alot too, but really whoever took your guy away isn't really your friend. Confront her.
Keep smilin'   Not everyone is worth your tears.

Salma
Marilyn
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4 posted 02-15-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Chin up my friend. There are many others that dislike Valentine's day as much as you do. (myself included). Just take comfort in knowing it will get better.  
poetry_kills
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allysa: this was certainly not a question to pose to me at this point in time... i'll refrain from answer, but i will say that your poem is very good... i particularly like the identification of the subject in the last line... good use of poetics...

sincerely,
jerome the melancholy priest

 Disarm you with a smile
And leave you like they left me here
To wither in denial
The bitterness of one who's left alone
--[billy corgan]--
Allysa
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6 posted 02-16-2000 08:28 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

Thanks for replying everybody. I feel a little better now. It's just sometimes, I get so mad cuz nothing seems to go right. Eric said he wouldn't go out with her and that he did like me but he likes someone else too, which, I guess, is okay. But I don't think I love him. Is it okay to really really love your best friend?? I think I do.


 Loves may seem forgotten, but the true will once shine through.
Allysa
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7 posted 11-08-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

thanks ya all, just addin this to my library.

Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not
DancinQueen
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8 posted 02-26-2001 04:14 PM       View Profile for DancinQueen   Email DancinQueen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DancinQueen

good poem~ And yes, it's ok to love your bestfriend. I love my 2 bestfriends and one of them is a guy. I'm just not IN LOVE with them. there's a huge difference. You seem kind of young to me, i could be totally off. But when you get older or more mature for that matter ( and dont think im calling you immature im just saying you learn things with age) neways...when u get older you'll learn who your true friends are, if you have any. some people dont meet their bestfriend(s) until they're 20something. Best wishes and i hope everything turns out ok

*dq


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤
Artic Wind
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Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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