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chic
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0 posted 2000-02-15 09:12 AM



I lay here
dreaming of you.
Remembering times
none of which are new.

What did I do?
What did I say?
What was it
that made him runaway?

I blame myself
it wasn't you.
I never knew
what exactly to do.

People say
it wasn't my fault.
I've locked my heart
inside a vault.

Never again
shall I trust.
Only to feel
what they call lust.

The only way
out of this stream.
Is to close my eyes
and Dream.


 To be or not to be...that is the question.

© Copyright 2000 Barbara Mendoza - All Rights Reserved
Dean
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since 1999-11-23
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1 posted 2000-02-15 11:51 AM


Tight poem girl!! I like the concept of it!! Anyways keep uo the good work!

 "Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)


Salooma
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2 posted 2000-02-15 12:13 PM


Great poem. I know exactly what you mean. I've felt like that too many times. Keep your head up!

Salma

chic
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since 2000-01-26
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3 posted 2000-02-15 12:35 PM


thanx guys this one was written in a time of terrible circumstances.love ya'll

 To be or not to be...that is the question.

Alwye
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In the space between moments
4 posted 2000-02-15 10:16 PM


I am definitely one who escapes my pain by dreaming.  Exellent, heartfelt work, Chic.  I hope things are going better for you.

[This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 02-15-2000).]

Jer
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
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5 posted 2000-02-16 07:15 PM


Good job. The poem had alot of emotion and hurt feelings placed in it. Sad read but it was a good write!

 "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler

chic
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6 posted 2000-02-17 09:07 AM


thanx all this one  wrote after my ex fiance' forgot we were engaged.

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



angel6917
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since 2000-01-14
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7 posted 2000-02-17 05:59 PM


Chic, I liked your poem, and the sad feelings shown are always a bummer to overcome.  I know some of what you feel, though I can't say all.  I'm here if you ever need to talk.  ~Kristi Lynn    
chic
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since 2000-01-26
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8 posted 2000-02-18 09:00 AM


Thanx kristi *sniffles* and say's I can't say anymore

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10
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San Jose, CA, USA
9 posted 2000-02-18 09:07 PM


Great poem chic, I like it a lot. I can relate it well to my current situation, where the girl I like keeps running away  
chic
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10 posted 2000-02-21 03:09 PM


thanx mistik ur sweet and don't worry u'll find one that won't run

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



sunshine17
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since 2000-01-20
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Bonduel, WI USA
11 posted 2000-02-21 03:54 PM


wow! what a poem.  i never thought someone eles could write excatly what i was feeling at the present moment for another.  
peanogrl83
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since 1999-12-04
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12 posted 2000-02-21 09:11 PM


Ahhh! How true your words ring, chic!! I too am, unfortunately, living vicariously through my dreams.....  :.)
                                Vreni

chic
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13 posted 2000-02-22 09:00 AM


thanx sunshine i felt like this often whenever my ex-fiance' proposed to another while we were engaged

thanx vreni i'm always living in my dreams...for me it seems dark and depressing opposed to the real world which i feel sucluded.

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



Gadget28
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since 2000-02-21
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Miami, Florida United States
14 posted 2000-02-22 01:51 PM


WHAT?!? Your fiance' proposed to another while you were engaged? WHAT A LOSER!!!! I hope the best for you, I loved your poem!
chic
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since 2000-01-26
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15 posted 2000-02-23 09:39 AM


Yea Gadget he proposed to another and didn't tell me the only way I found out was that the girl he proposed to asked me to be her maid of honor...even though we didn't really know each other.  If anything good happens to me...forget it...it ain't gonna happen.

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



chic
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16 posted 2000-02-24 09:10 AM


*bump*

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



chic
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17 posted 2000-02-25 09:04 AM


bump

 To be or not to be...that is the question.[hamlet]



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