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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA 
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The eternal flame of hope Of everlasting love An angels flight to heaven The pureness of a dove A sigh of relief From an enticing heart A song of praise Still worlds apart Like flowers in the wind This beautiful site The footprints of time A magical night Through the times we've shared A repainting of my soul The four corners of the world The secrets of a scroll The destiny of dreams A murder of crows What thoughts may come No one knows |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
You have an awsome way with words. And your use of imagery was most impressive. Great job my man! [This message has been edited by LyricFetish (edited 02-15-2000).] |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
trevor: this is excellent work... i like the transitions between lines that you use that ties it all together... clever clever... in fact, i have no meaningful criticisms... sincerely, jerome the melancholy priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Imagery is the key word to describe this poem! Great job. You really know it is good if Jerome doesn't give you any meaningful criticisms. LOL "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA |
It's really strange hearing such good things about my poems. I never get this sort of thing from my friends or family. In fact, no one even cares or says anything good about them. I do sincerely appreciate your words guys. It means a lot. Trevor |
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