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cK Navarro Junior Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 21Helsinki Finland |
When we first got started I so much wanted for more And now we´ve reached that point I realized how good it was before. Wanting you to be all mine have cost me all the good times Couldn´t wait for you to love me true was loosing the best of you. Now looking back to all the things we used to do I´m bound to believe that I really was so special to you. Loved and cherished together with tiny loving kisses Long talks over the phone keeping me awake until dawn And all the love you have shown have now left me all on my own. I´m sorry if I´ve been so blind couldn´t see you were already mine Your love so fine where I used to be the first one on the line Are here to remind me how you used to love me. Now they are all gone that moment of time were I used to be the one Who can bring up your smiling sun where you and I used to have fun. In my heart I know I´ve done nothing wrong God knows all I´ve wanted was a place to belong someone to hold me tight someone to love me right Are all I´m praying for in every crying nights. If you´ve felt I´ve took away your freedom and invade your privacy Then you must have misunderstood me. I´ve never meanted to do you any harm All I wanted was a hug to keep me warm and to feel safetiness in your arms. I don´t know why and I don´t know how I lost that love in you cuz all I ever did was love you true And I´m so sorry if my love for you made you want to be free There´s nothing else I can do but let you be Hoping you´d find that love again what you had for me.... |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
hmmm... interesting. I hope that special someone finds there love for you again. Nice first post in the Teen section of Passions. Welcome. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
cknavarro: i like this... mostly because it's different from the majority of the "why dont you love me?" poems i see in the teen forum... i'd have to say that the final stanza is your best here... the ideas are concisely and well-conveyed... good job sincerely, jerome the melancholy priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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