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S3NSATION18
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since 2000-01-26
Posts 31


0 posted 2000-02-12 12:04 PM


Just as things start to clear
They get shifted to high gear

I think I know but then I don't
my body wants to but my heart won't

I can't be happy with what I got
I won't be happy till i'm caught

Caught in between two guys
With nothing left but my lies

Taking for granted everything sweet and small
Wishing and wanting to have it all

I will get caught this i know
I must choose who will go

I've dug a hole almost too deep
I know now who i shall keep

The one who's clever,sweet,and smart
The one that's played a major part

The one i want to give my heart
I couldn't see Edward it was you form the start

© Copyright 2000 Kristina Gomez - All Rights Reserved
S3NSATION18
Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31

1 posted 2000-02-12 12:05 PM


In the last line it should be from*
Ender
Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA
2 posted 2000-02-12 12:47 PM


This is a very well written poem.  i am sorry to say i dont have a quote for you at the moment, but i will look.  keep up the great work.
-Ender


 *I am not one to be feared. I am one that should be loved forever. -Ender*

Jer
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
USA
3 posted 2000-02-12 10:43 PM


Hmmm... interesting.  Is this written from a current standpoint? For some strange reason, the line
quote:
I've dug a hole almost too deep
reminded me of what Macbeth said in Shakespears Hamlet.
"All causes shall give way: I am in blood
Stepp'd in so far that, should I wade no more,
Returning were as tedious as go o'er:"
Anyway, Good job.



 "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler

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