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The House of the Homeless |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
Note: this is one of my very first poems... it's about 3 years old and one of the few that i am not ashamed to show anyone... let me know what you think... House of the Homeless A million different faces A million different words A million different meals A million different worlds Never seem to be able to stay Always move from place to place I'm a homeless man with a house A lonely man with no place to go I go to my house where I hang my hat But a roof can't turn the loneliness back A place to live – a place to stay Ain't got no home – not here anyway They tell me home is where the heart is So I guess my home has been given away To a million friends, A million sins, A million faces, A million places. sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
Very well put poem...it is very touching and i hope that everyone reads it. keep up the good work. -Ender |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Ahhh.... I remember my first poem I wrote. I was so proud of it too. Good job Jerome. Thanks for sharing this with us. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Good poem Jerome, and remember, you always have a home here  I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
This is a really good poem....especially for your first....thanks for sharing it. Salma |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
thank you everyone but you do realize that you CAN be honest with me here... if it stinks, just tell me so *heh*  i wrote it when i moved for the umpteenth time (to texas that time, i believe)... again, thank you for your comments sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Good work Jerome. I can remember my first poem, ugh, it was shocker *L* I like it. |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
I can't even remember what my first poem was,*i have very bad memory*,but your first was good. I especially like the two lines starting with "A place to live" and ending with "not here anyway", nice job. "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE [This message has been edited by Nights (edited 02-12-2000).] |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
I think that for your first poem this is really......deep. I wrote my first at ten, and it was about how much I hated ballet. (my mom made me take it, and I guess I wanted her to know how I felt) It was pretty lame. So, I think you did a fantastic job on this. But that's just me....... |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lyric: this isn't my VERY first... that one was a "romance" poem that described the girl that i dreamt of finding one day... it wasn't too bad, but i dont usually post lovey-dovey stuff on here due to the overabundance of it already *heh*... this was probably my third or fourth, but thank you sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest p.s. -- so did you end up having to take ballet? A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Vincent Spaulding Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 59 |
Jerome, Your earlier poems are better than mine were. I started renumbering my poems when I began writing again at age 42. Of my earlier stuff, there's little I'd want to claim. I've lived my whole life in the same city, so I can't say that I identify with it. But it's well stated anyway. |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Jerome: It's a very good poem, especially for one of your first. If I can ever find my first, I'll post it, even though I think it stinks... Yours is really good, and we ARE being honest with you. ~Kristi Lynn  |
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