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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
What do you want from me? You want to love me- I want you to hate me. I love you, but I don't want you. You accept me, but I reject myself. You want me to be happy, but I want to be depressed. You want me to live, but I want to die. I want to be loved, but LEAVE ME ALONE. Whatever it is that you want from me, I can't give it to you. I can't even give myself what I need, and I don't even know exactly what I want. ~Kristi Lynn "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Sad is what you lined up there Emotions within yourself that you do and don't share A title well it's hard to say Here below that would be my way "Forgive me" Meaning yourself Nice poem but so sad, are you sure you want to feel this way. I somehow don't think so.  The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I suggest "In Search of Myself" as a title. Good writing! Danny |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Thank you for your replies. I'm still not sure of a title, I like your suggestions, but I'm not sure if it fits or not. Helmut: What makes you think I want to feel this way? I don't, but lately I haven't been in one of my better moods, in fact, lifes just plain been awful... ~Kristi Lynn "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Life is a dream, Lest ye dare to live it.. I'm gonna go off the deep end and write something stupid....hehe....but it fits.. When life gives you lemons, make lemonade...lol... i know,, i know...lame right... but then again...if you use the message written in a stupid way...it's not so stupid...(hum...i think i'm rambling..hehe) good job of expressing yourself.... "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Thanks for your reply, Majestic. I understand what you're trying to tell me, even if you ramble... Heh. Anyhoo, it means a lot to know that people understand how I express myself. ~Kristi Lynn "Why does no one sees how hard I cry?" -Me |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Nothing made me think that way I hope you didn't have to feel at all this way, that's what I meant to say I only know to well the feeling that you wrote about within your poem No offence or implication where intented <!signature--> <font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. </font> [This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
I myself understand how u feel, everyone has a good opinion about me but i'm forever putting myself down, not that i want to it's just that it seems as though the bad stuff is easier to believe...as for a title i think War would work but it doesn't really fit but atleast something to that affect because basically it is a war between u and others. Great work   To be or not to be...that is the question. |
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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
This is pretty good, how about "What You Want I Can't Give" for a title. Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love. |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
**What do you want for me?**---that should be the title--i usually do that for my poems---use the first line of the poem....great poem though...keep up the great work. -Ender *I am not one to be feared. I am one that should be loved forever. -Ender* |
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