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*TruAngel*
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since 2000-02-05
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Milan, Italy,

0 posted 2000-02-06 02:10 AM


I wonder where it all went! It's scary because something so meaningful, like food,water.
Without it you couldnt live, so what about the other? If only the other could understand.
Maybe if we felt eachother for one second we'd get it back. Is it really gone? Who or what exacally started it? Is it important? Over and over like "rewind"
Wheres the stop button? Why and who broke it? Can't stand this feeling, losing my heart, soul, mind.
Will I go insane? Was it my fault? yes/no.
Can never make an inderstanding, never have the courage to say I'm hurt, I feel it! Why do I feel it's my fault? Never pure, never good.
Always looking for my place, a safe place. Nver suceeding, always failing.
Why so good, yet so bad. So bad, yet so good.
What next? failing? failure? am I?
Or does love meake me feel so? Filling an empty void so dangerously awaiting another moment of emptiness. fearful. Selfisher, selful, or neither. Not even both. Could that develop into a problem? When will this emptiness stop? How does love fix? Or when hurt never to be forgiven? or trusted from hurting something so fragile? forgetness? or forgivness? What would work best? Hurts to bad to look back, maybe it's NOT better. It just hurts. everything hurts, every body part hurts. Never love, never care because love creates a hurt so deep and so felt it makes you hate. Love creates hate and maybe even sometimes, hate can create love. So sorry love makes hate. Not supposto feel l ike that, but why risk? why feel? why love when it hurts so bad. But underneath it's warm, safe, tender and your best friend. Can't live without it. Why so? Protect yourself. I love, love when does love not create hate. Why hate? Why not understand?

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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

1 posted 2000-02-08 10:11 AM


this is a good revealing of your innermost feelings...the torment is expressed well, its very sad, but good....
one suggestion would be to add a few more line breaks, it would make it easier to read and follow  

sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
2 posted 2000-02-08 11:05 AM


Good job angel...great show of your feelings..I hope it works out!  

~~Lavada~~

rich-pa
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since 2000-02-07
Posts 317
New Orleans, Louisiana
3 posted 2000-02-08 11:24 AM


dig it yo, you do great with your expression of the confusion you have,  granted a few line breaks would make reading easier but i feel that the lack thereof makes the confusion stand out even more...it kinda makes this jumbled mess, which is what confusion is all about, right?

--rich-pa

SEA
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4 posted 2000-02-08 12:36 PM


Angel,I felt the hurt and confusion you were going through. It will be better. Remember and never forget~ Love is not supposed to hurt you or make you feel worthless. Sometimes when you feel for someone you get hurt along the way, but sweetie, that's all a part of the learning process~ how else are you going to be able to recognize your true love? Kiss a few frogs idea~ ya know?-SEA
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